Hi there! Crissy Marx here to hopefully give a "long review"...
First off...I like the concept of the poem a lot. I actually relate to this poem a lot because I am always given a hard time by my mother and sometimes I want to write a poem too.
I just feel like it was a tad bit cliche (insert accent on e). And sometimes you capitalized words that didn't necessarily need to be if you know what I'm saying.
Another thing....what are those slashes during the poem? Is that just for decoration or organization or what because it really threw me off while reading it.
This poem actually reminded me of the ones people would read during poetry slams. Dramatic ones that are sometimes perfectly dramatic or overly dramatic. I felt this was a little bit of the ladder, sorry to say.
But I like how you are open to criticism. That's the first step to being a wonderful writer. Keep writing!
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