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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening!

I really loved your poem!

It started with four stanza's each one with four lines. They each spoke of a different type of lies, and of masks that you wear. Then it gets short. and the short ones seem to speed up the poem, making it seem like the person lying is about to break.

And then everything pours out. The piles of lies, that never stop, and will never end.

This was my interpretation of this poem, and it seems like raw, true, and unfiltered emotion. I really loved this poem.

-Lizzy

Good Poem Great Write Would Love Too Read More Sometime

Hi! Its Rodionandaxe, how do you do? Here's a little review,

First thing, i love the fact that you have used so many perspectives in this poem, usually poems that deal with decieving people or hiding ones true self its about one person but here as i understand there are many (the fact that you keep changing the pronouns).

The most wonderful thing about your poetry is how pleasant it is to read, how it beautifully rhymes and how one can imagine someone singing it. The rhythm makes it really enjoyable.


I also had a question, what if i were to perceive this poem as the same protagonist changing their gender among different people? I mean, i think its important for the reader to know how the poet wants them to interpret the poem also i think the poet's opinion about how their poem should be perceived matters a lot too.

All in all, i loved your poem. Its a wonderful piece. Its also relatable because all of us have tried to hide our emotions and appear cheery and jolly at least at some point. So keep writing such inspiring pieces. Can't wait to read more of your work.
Toodles!

(I just realized i did not submit this as a review. i am new around here, i do not know how to fix this, so i am sorry.)

Hi! This is nightshadows bring a new comment live to a theater near you! Ok, so enough of my weirdness here are my thoughts:

Oh why hello there! Saw that you legged me in this and I like had to read it!!! I love the way that it repeats its points throughout the story and i loved the strong ending!!!

when you lie again

you can try again

but it won't happen

your lies'll be tappin'

and you're lies will be flyin'

and your mouth--

it'll just keep lyin'

Totally sound slike something you could add a tune too!! Love it so much!! Great job <3