A/N: This is a random parody I wrote on Elton John’s “Candle in the Wind.” The twist: it’s about dinosaurs. Don't ask why.
Goodbye, dinosaurs
Though I never saw you at all
You had the strength to fight for life
While meteors ‘round you fell
They stormed down from the heavens
And they whistled past your head
They sent you from this earth
And all that’s left are bones
.
And it seems to me you died that day
Like a candle in the wind
Never knowing how to survive
When the storm arrived
And I would have liked to see you
But now you are extinct
Your candle burned out long before
Mother Nature closed the door
.
Dinosaurs were tough
The toughest creatures in the world
Hollywood created a superstar
In "Jurassic Park" and more
Even though you’ve died
Archeologists dig you up
All the little boys have to say
Is that dinosaurs are pretty cool
.
And it seems to me you died that day
Like a candle in the wind
Never knowing how to survive
When the storm arrived
And I would have liked to see you
But now you are extinct
Your candle burned out long before
Mother Nature closed the door
.
Goodbye dinosaurs
Though I never saw you at all
You had the strength to fight for life
While meteors ‘round you fell
Goodbye dinosaurs
From the young girl in 2014
Who sees you as something more than special
More than just our terrible lizards
.
And it seems to me you died that day
Like a candle in the wind
Never knowing how to survive
When the storm arrived
And I would have liked to see you
But now you are extinct
Your candle burned out long before
Mother Nature closed the door
I've never heard this song before but your flow and rythm in your parody was great. Your sta as were fun yet also thoughtful and deep whether you meant it or not good job. I really saw nothing bad I loved everything about it and can't wait to read more by you 
great job
-Nightshade21
Hello.
While this is a parody and you have stuck very close to the rhyme scheme, you have some spots that are lacking. Namely bones, cool, and "2014". I add the last in because you can say it "two thousand fourteen" or "twenty fourteen", with the former wrecking flow and the latter fitting with it.
There's also some others like all/fell, which have different vowel sounds and therefore aren't quite as perfect as they could've been.
The thing about parodying songs is you still need to keep the original flow and rhymes even when you change the topic around, which you've come close to but not quite achieved.
Past that, it was fairly clever to take dinosaurs as the topic because it makes for such a literal translation of the whole idea of "candle in the wind". Although I think this could be even funnier if you took the candle in the wind and found a way to repurpose that, so it reflected the total cataclysm that was the mass extinction of dinosaurs. Parodies don't have to be exact replicas of the story itself, so you do have the room to mess with even the original title so long as you keep the same general flow.
Hope this helps. Let me know if you have any questions or comments.
~Rosey
Thank you for your help!Hey wolf~
I'm going for my elite eight challenges. The lyrics part is hard ;n; I'm going to give you the best review I can. I'm not a big Elton John fan, so I had to go research and listen to this song because I'd never heard it before XD
For my creative writing class, I had to write parodies and hated them with every fiber of my body, so many points for actually writing a decent parody. *gold clap*
Okay, on to the very few negatives I have:
Your candle burned out long before
Mother Nature closed the door
Maybe keeping the "legend" part would make more sense. I had actually planned on dong that, but I was afraid of using too much of the original song. I think that I'll change that now! Thank you!Okay, I have to admit, this is awesome. Except you didn't really rhyme. I always think songs should rhyme to sound good. It should. And in the third paragraph, I think it was a bit like a little kid, especially the little boy part. I kind of lost interest there.
This was great, I loved it, funny, awesome. Keep writing!
Hey Wolfie!
Can I just say, this parody was very well done! You still had the same idea, but with a different topic (if that makes sense...you stuck to the song very well)
So I'll go through nitpicks, praise, and then what can be worked on.
Let's get started, shall we?
And they whistled past your head
And all that’s left is bones
And I would have liked to seen you
Dinosaurs were tough
The toughest creatures in the world
More than just our terrible lizards
The line kind of read awkward to me 
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