Hello. It's Mahvash here. I hope you are having a great life.
This poem is somewhat evocative. It gives you feels of heartbreak. It is engaging and every line depicts a new kind of pain, a new kind of rejection. You have done an amazing job.
Suggestion:
Your soul is so pure
It makes me blind with the light
You can (if you want to, this is a suggestion not a compulsive task) substitue the word "Pure" with "Bright" and I think it will seem a bit appropriate.
But anyways, I am impressed. Well done. Keep up this good work.
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