Hey!
This is a great song. It's a beautifully balanced blend of emotion and an underlying sense of darkness, however personally for me to be able to achieve the full emotional impact, instead of ocean blue you could possibly change it to darkness or even abyss - I don't know it's just suggestions it's your song though! You have much potential as a lyricist, however, so please keep writing because well you're very talented.
An example of a change I would make:
Deep into the darkness,
Take us back to where we started,
Where my heart sinks down to cry for you,
If you understood us, if only you knew.
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