Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
And time for another chapter.
First Impression: Okay...a different perspective to things. I like the direction that took this in. It's good get a sense of how the rest of the world is reacting and how they are viewing America's rebuilding efforts.
Anyway let's get to it,
“Denmark, Norway, Sweden, and Finland wish to remove themselves from the war,” the foreign secretary repeated more slowly. If he could have been any paler, he would have. It was the worst news they’d had since the defeat at Minsk.
That started off with quite the knowledge bomb. Pity that this conflict was resolved so quickly.
“No,” she said firmly. "I'm going to give them a piece of my mind."
And lots of threatening ensued.
That afternoon, the Prime Minister had Loxley return to her office-- this time, with the entire Cabinet. There, the men, women, and other persons of the government awaited the news from Europe and abroad.
The men, women and other persons....sounds a bit awkward. You're going to be better of simply saying government officials or something like that rather than listing that out.
The minister answered her with a soft voice. “Two states, Michigan and Winsconsin, have made contact with Canada, requesting electricity and supplies while awaiting word from the nation at large. It seems most everything west of the Mississippi river with parts of Illinois have reformed into a fascist, anti-democracy nation. New England, meanwhile, has begun to reform itself and established tires with Florida…”
And they found this out by....?? Spies?? Calling each of these separate states?? How exactly?
Nolan Ray Peters, former Mayor of Muscle Shoals, headed the Redneck Republic;
Former Florida governor Geraldine Wilson was now over the Coastal States;
General Arthur Terrence was now acting governor of an independent Virginia;
Louisiana Attorney General Amy Vance had been elected first president of Texas by the remnants of the Texan, Louisianan, and part of the Mississippi legislatures;
Tennessee was under control of what appeared to be the legitimate US government-- Godfrey Smith was the only known survivor in the presidential line of succession. The new governor of Tennessee, Percy Evans, had reappointed a number of officials and all but rebuilt his state’s legislature and established the new state and federal government in Memphis and Jackson respectively.
Okay that's another info dump right there. This one fits better because this is an official report so this can be allowed to slide.
“I want you to be my successor as head of the Labour Party. But first… we have a war to end, and a fascist to stop.” The Indian Briton walked over to his side and placed a hand on the foreign secretary’s shoulder. “Make me proud, Loxley.”
Possible plot detected finally. That took a while.
"Like I said... make me proud, Loxley."
That's a pretty nice line to end on there. Keeps you hooked.
Aaand that's it.
Overall: Overall the perspective change is nice. I like Birkwood's character. She got a pretty decent amount of development from her actions in this chapter and that's always great. Loxley again didn't feel that distinct but does sound like a pretty interesting character to follow.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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