I really love this, I think for two special points:
1. The beauty and clarity of this poem
2. The deep meaning and the words you used to describe.
Gosh, this is beautiful. I love your words, the way the lines melt and flow together perfectly, and just the complex yet simplicity of it.
My favorite verse would have to be:
"In the abyss where few souls wander,
Water as heavy as it is deep,
And day as dark as night,
A whole world swims undetected,
Unappreciated, understudied."
(I interpret things very seriously sometimes haha)
This makes a lot of sense and it's like a metaphor to describe human emotions and struggles. I interpreted it as if the bioluminescent light could shed hope to the deep, dark below except it is too far away, unknown and ignored. I really love this (wow I keep repeating myself). Anyways, I think this poem should honestly win an award, you should enter in contests and magazines!
The only thing I felt that was out of place was the definition at the beginning. It felt a bit blocky, maybe you could change it up a bit to rhyme and flow into the next verse?
I loved the idea and the sort of scientific inspiration!
Hopefully, my review wasn't super cheesy haha!
Keep writing, this was beautiful!
Points: 428
Reviews: 21
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