Young Writers Society

Oh My wow. I really just love this poem. As a christian, I love how you didn't lay it on too thick and from the racism perspective it's something everyone can relate with as it is a HUGE issue in todays society.

The fact that you made reference to the two most Imporant commandments in the bible gives me mind bubbles because some people really don't know how simple it is. And I love how it seems kinda like a prayer, a communication with God, pointing out just how abundant his grace is, because I relate too well with you on that.

I'm definately praying that prayer with you, Amen.

Good job Tucker, Please keep it up, and I hope God continues to bless you and further your literary skills.
Spreading God's love <3

Wow! This was an awesome poem that really speaks a lot! As someone who likes to paint, I really understand that we need different colors to paint a picture! Even if you do gray scale, you still need different shades to see the picture. Also, I think you are an awesome poet! ;3 As a Christian, I have thought about most of the points in your poem a lot, but you still really brought it to light! Keep up the awesome work!

I honestly love this poem, it shows you poured your heart into it. I am a catholic-Christian and believer. If we are really honest with ourselves, do we really love our neighbor? Our neighbor can be a friend, family member, or stranger. How can we say we love our neighbor when we judge ourselves? Love is an important emotion and feeling, and something our culture misunderstands a lot! It involves we take risks, and part of being a Christian is taking a leap of faith, not all at once but it's what makes our faith come alive. Thank you for sharing this! Keep writing.

Oh my God!
I just love it cause its so very beautiful and well-crafted.
Well done, Tucker....

This is beautiful!

I loved this poem. I love how it emphasizes the most important commandments:love others and God, rather than the little ones in Leviticus and throughout that modern-day Christians like to point out to justify their prejudices. This poem made love important, rather than the whole "hate the sin, love the sinner" mindset that has risen to the surface today. Overall, you did a great job, and I loved this. Please message me or something if you decide to write more. Thank you, God bless!

Aww <3 I really like this.
Thank you for pointing out how wrong, well, sinful really, it is to discriminate someone because of the color of their skin. Like, that is SO not of God! I love that "no color deserves more glory than the others" part. I mean, amen! We don't worship our race - we worship God! Whooh!
Anyway. I was considering reviewing this, but I'm kind of horrible at poetry so I'll just leave this comment xD
Thanks for writing this!

Hi there!

Whatcha here, dropping in for a review that was well worth it

Whether Christian or not, this is such a good point. We're all equal! What do colours have to do with our ranks?

Okay, sorry, moving onto the review.
I just want to point out, first, that rhyming all the lines is super hard, and you did a great job of it.

How can we decide to let our hearts harden
Against our friends and neighbors, just how? << This seems a bit repetitive, with the 'how's ... Perhaps, instead of a comma, you could do a period: 'Against our friends and neighbor. Just how?' You could even italicize how - Just how? I feel like this would make it flow better.

Evil has taken over our broken landperiod
Oh God, we've really messed this upcomma
I can't meet the standard you demand
But still you pour blessings into my cupperiod

We're all hatin' our sisters and brothers
You only gave us 2 very simple commands << I would add 'when' before 'you' to help with the flow. I think I also forgot to mention, that flow is very important in poems, unless, as I said before, you're writing in a choppy style for effect.

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We have made a distinction between me and you

We need different colors to paint the story << yes, yes, yes!!! Sorry, I just agree so much.
Of our world, and all are beautiful
We are all the same, no color deserves more glory
Than the others, just as wonderful and colorful << it's annoying, but colorful and beautiful don't rhyme. When you compare 'beautiful' and 'colorful' to 'beautiful' and 'shoot a mole' you'll see what I mean