Hey, ThatGeekyGirl. I am here to provide you a review. Let's get started, shall we?
I won't get into any grammar or sentence issues because someone else has already covered that. I am going to review Character Development, Setting, and Plot. Here we go.
Character Development
I believe Atlas and Finn should have been more described. I know you provided visual representations for your story, but you can draw in your readers more if you provide imagery. As for the characters themselves, I like the emotions each character had throughout the whole story. Sadness and pain, great job on that. Things you should consider working on are:
- Developing a sense of imagery for characters in future work.
- Developing more personality for your characters.
Setting:
I do understand that the setting took place in the 1800s, but where? Setting is time and place. Be sure next time for future to provide a place.
Plot:
I do realize that this is a short story. From what I understand, the plot was that Atlas touched Finn's black wings? And since that happened, Atlas gained power while Finn lost power, resulting in death, but luckily, it wasn't FInn's time to die so she was resurrected as an angel? That's what I got from it. The story was full of love, sadness, and pain. It can make one feel like they are going to cry. The plot is simple, that's why I liked your story. It's simplicity.
Overall, your story was great in the plot department, but your character development skills and setting skills need to be worked on. Hopefully, this will provide you some insight on what you can do to become a better writer. Don't worry, I used to be same way when I first started writing, and I can tell you have so much potential. Keep up the great work. Keep writing!
- Kanome
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