Hey there!
FIRST OF ALL never ever ever diss your own work.
After all, they say one man's trash is another man's treasure. I find this to ring true particularly in the writing world.
Now onto the poem itself.
I will be critical, but bear in mind it's all meant to be constructive, not to insult or offend.
Firstly, I find that this is fairly ambiguous as a poem---What I mean is this: read the poem as though you hadn't written it and this is your first time seeing it. Now tell me, if you didn't write it, would you think that person was dead or just out of their life? Hard to tell for me. This isn't a bad thing. It just may have been unintentional ambiguity.
"But it's to late for that" should say too instead of to. Minor fix.
The idea of the poem itself is very touching. To think that you once had something beautiful, but lost it, is very heart wrenching for those that have been through that very experience. I myself found myself hurting a bit at this poem.
Lastly, I wanted to say that this poem is a lot like my own writing style--straightforward. I find that your word choice is a lot like mine too.
Anyway, i enjoyed this very much.
Keep writing.
Sincerely,
~ Midnight
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