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Drawings (Extended)

by SpunkyMonkey


there was a girl
who taught me to draw
her drawings were hasty
lightly scratching the surface,
though occasionally pressed too hard
she drew in secret, behind closed doors
the ones who saw her drawings cried
they expressed such agony, such pain
she drew to escape the darkness
a bitter relief

she showed me her drawings
one lonely, starry night
the darkness was overpowering me
i couldn’t fight back
but the girl brought me a light
dim and cold, but still drove away the shadows
she exposed her drawings, her body a filled canvas
a whisper floated through the air
i draw

now i draw too
my drawings are careful
row after row, neat and precise
i draw in secret, behind closed doors
no one has seen my drawings
they express despair, hardships
i draw to fight against the looming darkness
a scarred life is better than tragic death


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Wed Oct 20, 2021 3:20 pm
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cryptologenic wrote a review...



hi there! poppin' in to review :]

i really enjoyed the melancholic and somewhat reflective tone of the poem. i thought the metaphor of drawing was pretty effective and evoked a strong sense of imagery.
i found this:

a scarred life is better than tragic death

to be particularly poignant. i have a friend who goes through similar struggles and this poem helped me to understand their struggle a little.

i hope you're doing well, thank you for sharing <3




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thank you for reading this! im glad this poem could help you understand your friend some :)



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Hello! I’m Kai! This is my first review so I hope it is alright…

First off oh wow
Second off OH WOW

I have often thought of cuts and scars as a sort of drawing on the skin I love the way you portray it is as such. Also you seem to have captured one of my greatest fears in a poem so good job for that.

This poem is bitter and sad and puts those things together beautifully.

In conclusion good work

Keep writing

Wear your seatbelt




SpunkyMonkey says...


Thank you for the review! I%u2019m honored to be your first review :) <3



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You've described how it feels to feel imperfect. Feeling like you have to "draw" on your body feels horrible, but at the same time, a sickening escape. You want to do it because you believe you have no other choice. You put these feelings on paper, then a poem. I'm not usually one to read or understand poems, but the poems I've read on YWS are so simple, yet complex in their own unique ways.




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SpunkyMonkey says...


Sorry if you didn%u2019t want to be tagged, I just figured you might want to read the revised version of this poem :)




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