"Pink petals precipitate, Heaven's buoyant blossom falls,on this gibbous moonlit night,an Eastern wind conducts the dance,the petals pirouetting in an everlasting ballet."
Hello, FlamingPhoenix here with a review on this lovely day, to help get your work out the green room. Okay let's start. So I thought this was just a beautiful poem, it was short, and I would have liked it to be a bit longer. But It was short and sweet. I could feel the soft wind mixed with soft pink petals blowing through my hair. I think you have made a really good image here, and I felt like I was right there standing near the tree. I did see one line I would like to point out.
on this gibbous moonlit night,
the petals pirouetting in an everlasting ballet."
Hi Anice here for review Amazing, you totally captured the feel of the scene you described! I could just feel the cold wind blowing on my face, the moonlight sparkling and softly illuminating the surrounding. The words made that cherry blossom patel float slowly down riding the air, it's feather like soft descent. It really is like few lines capturing the essence of beauty. Though it would have been amazing if this beauty had been earthbound by a solid circumstance. But maybe it would have just taken away some of it's freedom. And please don't take this as empty flattery, because the poems imagery is really striking.Anyway, thank you for sharing such an amazing poem with us. I would be looking forward for your new work.
This is amazing! I love how you described the Cherry Blossoms in such nice detail! It left me wanting more! I
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