Young Writers Society

Hello 'Tato, welcome to The Young Writer's Society and congrats on your first star! Hopefully you're finding everything you need, but if you run into any confusion, or need a helping hand; feel free to dm me, or any of our mods! We're always happy to help

Now onto reviewing! You did ask me to review Hurt, but somehow I managed to end up here first.... It's okay, I'll probably end up reviewing all three of your currently published works.

I very much understand what you're saying here, where you're coming from. I struggle with a lot of mental issues, with a lot of stress, anxiety, depression, self harm, etc. I finally have no Plan. I'm just here, for better or worse. Regardless of whether or not you struggle with what you've written about, or are just writing from an abstract point of view; words like these stem from somewhere. Again, if you need an ear, or an empathetic, sympathetic friend, m figurative door is always unlocked.

Now.. On to reviewing the actual poetry.

Your formatting is good, you don't necessarily have a true AB rhyme scheme going on here, but the way you made every other line almost rhyme works really well. Punctuation in poetry is purely subjective. Some people use perfect, "acceptable," punctuation, while others use it sporadically to really accentuate what they are trying to say or show. I like how you used it, it works well. You've got perfect grammar, and no misspelled words. The only thing I have to point out is that there's a line space between your first and second line, right at the beginning, and that defies the formatting of the rest of the work here.

You're an excellent writer; honest, raw, open, real. Don't let those uncommon qualities slip away.

Great job, and keep on writing,
Autopilot.

Hey Mack! This poem is amazing, and I do hope these aren't your personal thoughts...
With hopes that this is just a poem and not your inner thoughts, My favorite lines were the last two stanzas. They flow beautifully and morbidly and wow. Great job! Don't kill yourself. I'll be in the library tomorrow if it's open.

Okay, first off, I have to say that I am crying right now. Next, I know where you are. I have been there myself. I was never actually able to self-harm in that way, but I did other things that were possibly worse. I did start contemplating suicide for a while, and I still battle a lot of things, it just wasn't as bad as it was before. You have definitely touched me, and if you need a friend, don't ever hesitate to Private Message me. I have been where you are now, and I totally understand. Hang in there, it will get better, I promise. Please, Please do not end your life.