Young Writers Society

Three words.
I love this.
I would follow you if I weren't already.

Dude. This is absolutely beautiful. I'm considering transferring it to a pretty font and framing it. I entirely adore this piece, and while I considered, I'd never be able to review it because I have no realm for suggestions or criticisms, as this travels so far above my head, into the galaxies beyond, floating amidst stars of literary genius. Much love for this piece, and for you of course.

Paige

Hey, yo, Nightcrawler! Strange here on this fantastic Review Day and I have a review for you!

Let me start out by saying, I'm a big fan of your poetry. It touches upon subjects that I'm not fond of, but you find the way to access the majority of the potential. I was not upset when I read this because it went beyond my expectations. This was a pretty darn good work, and I give you major props for it. There are certain aspects that I was especially fond of, so I'll go into them first. Let's jump in, shall we?

Break-up/heartbreak poetry is common to the point where it gets on my nerves to read and review. It always talks about having double thoughts about the relationship and trying to make the reader feel this false feeling of heartbreak. The poem does do this, but you had this really interesting comparison to tectonic plates and the Earth moving which brought this neat flair to it. Along with talking about forced affection, you made this strong. I love that.

we are tectonic plates, you and i.

hold me tight as the world spins, darling.

i woudl adore beautiful tragedies if it weren't for

so many lives lost and forgotten.

"you two were simply made for each other"

the earth adores change, and maybe

so do i.

Hey there Kat here to review for the fire nation ! Excuse typos I'm using an iPhone .

So , I really loved this ! It painted a lot of beautiful images in my mind and I adored the fact that I haven't really ever seen a piece quit like this . No just the strange formatting , but the analogy of love and Pangea giving it more of ... Personification ? I don't know sorry ... Tripping over myself .

However I really feel like maybe there's just to much going on here. The thing in the second line and you did it in some other lines ... What is that ? I think maybe you have two desperate ideas you tried to make one thing and I think it just would have flowed better had you focused purely on your comparison . Though , the confusion does help the reader really understand this person feelings of love intermingled with doubt and that made it more relatable . You can't have tire love without doubt . One last thing , try reading our poems out loud and fixing anything that SOUNDS out of place or choppy .

Thanks for this delightfully different and refreshingly new piece of literature ~
Kat

this was a really good, creative piece of work. I liked how you compared two lovers to tectonic plates... that is a sign of a smart writer. I can relate to this in a lot of ways. The descriptions are wonderful, and I like the emotion added/intense feelings