Young Writers Society

Hi there, mordax here!

I loved this poem and found it really interesting. I read it through a few times and viewed it differently each time. I have no critiques so I will simply provide commentary

When I initially read through this poem, I saw the claw as mental health--this depression as it comes to snag at you. The way you try to fight these shadows and find light but instead, that light continues to dim. Even the lines "my killer is my healer" I can relate to. It's as if these shadows you have tried so hard to run from and fight are in some ways a source of comfort. (not all the time though)

The second time I read it through, I saw it more as a portrayal of death. The way it is something to fear in life but when it finally comes for us all, ending our time, it's not so fearsome and rather it can be peaceful for life is the real horror.

Overall, I loved this poem and the different ways it could be interpreted. Wonderful job! You have a great way of eloquently expressing your thoughts while leaving them full of imagery and ambiguity.

mordax

Wow, this is really an amazing one and I love it. Though it is a two verse poem, but it makes a whole lot of sense that is striking to the mind of the reader and could create a synergy of thoughts, that encompasses with it an imagery and suspenseful memory "now my killer is my healer. And her warmth a memory". I don't know the real idea intended for the poem or this part, but who would believe that your killer would turn out to become your healer.
More especially, I like the way you handled your figures of speech to create a conducive idea that relates the poem to the original background, but I think your poem's language is neither cold nor hot. What I mean for a fact is that the poem is not a high or low sounding one and as such may confuse the reader, and as for me, I tried hard to comprehend the theme of the poem.
Your diction and tone are a bit delusive and lacking, but I think your literary terms covered up for that. Try working on your writing techniques, its really helpful in the sense.
Apart from this, I don't have much to give as a review because you really hit the nail and pull the trigger.
Thank you for writing this, and I hope to review more of your work. Write on.