After the quiet beauty of the Giving Pool, waking to the cold, damp cave and the stale air was cruel. Cassia lit a rock with a touch of her hand, bringing a touch of Mithrinde to the oppressive cavern. The memory of her dream washed over her again, sending chills of wonder down her spine. She sighed and smiled at the light she had made. Now she knew that, whatever happened, Mithrinde was with her.
She got up and moved right in front of the great iron door, pressing her ear against the crack. She didn’t hear anything, but with nothing else to do she settled there anyway. She had long since determined that the few personal belongings Iona had left her had no significant magical essence of any sort.
She lost track of time again, staring at the far wall and thinking of home and of simpler days. Before Micah sickened. Before Mother died.
Her daydream was so deep that when the blue ribbon of magic first materialized in the air and streaked across her view, Cassia thought she was imagining it. Then it formed into words, and Cassia sat bolt upright.
How did it go? Dad wants you to scry him. I know you would’ve if you got it. Are you okay? We’re running out of—.
The message ended there, but it wasn’t hard to guess what the last word should have been. The Treatise wasn’t designed to last past the Renewal. They were running out of time. But one way or another, it would be renewed tonight.
Cassia traced the words with her finger, wishing more than anything that she was home in Mithrinde, lying on her bed with the door between their two rooms open. She had far more to tell her sister than she could fit in a handful of words.
The message flickered. She didn’t have much time to reply. She stuck her finger in one of the letters. It melted like blue ink on her fingertip, and she scrawled out her reply.
I’m okay. Out of quills. Can’t scry either. Lots has happened. First plan failed, but this one’s better. See you soon.
She reread the message, then added the last flourish to send it. There was no point in saying anything about Mithrinde or the truth about the Treatise. Not when she couldn’t explain any of it in full.
The message uncurled into a blue ribbon again and vanished, leaving Cassia alone again. She waited, hoping against hope that Tilana would send her another message, but none came. She had omitted the truth too well.
The bar locking the iron door behind her scraped horribly against its rack.
“Oh,” Cassia whispered, rubbing her eyes quickly to brush away a trace of disappointed tears. “Why now?”
She scooped up her glowing pebble and put it in her pocket, dimming the light with another touch. “Mithrinde is with me,” she whispered to herself as she got up and backed away from the door.
It creaked open, a familiar figure standing in front of the torchlight. “Bind her,” Iona commanded, and two of her guards came and bound her wings and hands as they had when they first took her prisoner.
“I won’t do anything,” Cassia said, but Iona took no notice.
“Please,” she added, wincing as the guards cinched the knots. “That hurts.”
But neither of them were the kind-faced young man who had given her her bedroll the day before, and they ignored her words.
They presented her to Iona, who pressed a cold hand at the nape of Cassia’s neck and steered her forward. They walked in silence in the dark tunnels.
“Is it time?” Cassia asked. It couldn’t have been, not already.
“Not yet,” Iona said.
She wouldn’t say anything more. As they reached a joining of several tunnels, Iona gave a wave of her hand, and the guards following them nodded and split off into one of the fully lit tunnels, leaving Iona and Cassia alone.
Iona regarded Cassia for a long time, eyes burning cold. Then she turned down the rightmost passage, which was dark but ascended out of sight. She walked without looking back, taking the torchlight with her.
Cassia followed. The only alternative was to remain where she was, lost in a web of tunnels with her hands and wings bound and only a faintly glowing stone for light.
The tunnel turned and climbed, and soon Cassia was stumbling along, her calves burning, trying desperately to both keep up with a rapidly receding Iona and not slip on the smooth rock.
They came to a rigid set of rough stair-like cuts in the stone, each as tall as Cassia’s knee. She climbed one and then another, and another and another, but on the fifth stair her foot slipped and she fell hard, rolling to her shoulder but still smacking her chin against the rock. She cried out as she fell and tasted blood after her chin hit stone.
Before she drew in a second breath, that cold hand clutched the back of her travel dress and pulled her up. Cassia scrambled to get her feet under herself. A trickle of blood ran from her lip down her chin, but she set her face and refused to wince in pain. Iona would be satisfied if she thought Cassia was weak.
Iona raised an eyebrow. “Well, since you are plainly too clumsy to walk without aid —” She touched a finger to the ropes around Cassia’s wrists. The knots unraveled at once and the cords fell to the floor. “—use your hands like a dog.”
Cassia almost laughed at the bizarre insult, but she set her jaw and did not mention that it was leaving her wings bound that made the climb the most difficult. Her arms were small and provided little counterbalance, while with every step she took now her wings strained instinctively against the ropes, trying to move with the rhythm of walking. Instead they were twenty pounds of deadweight pressed against her back.
Still, having her hands free helped, and Cassia made the rest of the climb without falling again. The top of the wide stair opened into fading, shadowed sunlight. Iona waited for her at the edge of the light. Cassia stepped fully out of the landing and gasped.
She was standing nearly at the top of the Hive, and the sun was setting. The spire of rock was only thirty feet across at this point, and most of it had been carved to make a wide, low-ceilinged, open-walled room, with thick pillars of stone holding up the point of the spire above. Wind whistled through the pillars near the ceiling. Though a thin rim of stone around the edges of the platform blocked some of the raw elements, Cassia’s feet still sank into inch-thick sand deposited by the wind over untold years.
Cassia marveled at the unlikely visage — the setting sun spilling orange across the striated, beautifully smoothed stone, the almost cool wind dancing in her hair.
Then she saw the bones. They slumped in the lee of a pillar, bleached white and glinting in the sun. Though the skeleton was half-buried in sand, a pair of wings spread unmistakably from its back, flared out against the pillar like the tattered sticks of an old hand fan.
Cassia clapped a hand to her mouth and stumbled back, letting out a strangled gulp despite herself. Her right heel brushed something as she backed away.
Behind her, in the lee of a pillar that was less a pillar and more thick and rectangular like a wall, an enormous, half shattered ribcage curved above her. Cassia stifled a scream and walked backwards to the staircase landing, not taking her eyes off the skeletons, gruesome and beautiful in death.
Iona was leaning against one of the pillars, her arms folded, the ghost of a smile playing around her eyes. She had brought Cassia here for this, to shock her or make her afraid or to prove something.
“Like what you see?” Iona said bitingly. “A drake and an angel together in death. However much your father disavows them now, he certainly welcomed their shelter in the last days before they sealed the Treatise.”
Cassia saw now that Iona was standing over the shattered remains of a smaller skeleton, one that looked entirely human and still clutched a cracked spear.
“What is this place?” Cassia asked, though she had her guess.
“One hundred and three years ago and five hundred feet below us, your Archpriests imprisoned our gods even as we fought you above.” Iona spat at the skeleton with the outstretched wings. “What this place is, angel, is proof of your guilt. Soon your judgement also will be at hand.”
Cassia crouched beside the skeleton of the angel, fighting back a shudder. She had never seen a dead body before, though this was so long dead it was only bones. Its ribs were splintered and cracked, probably from the wound that killed it. And a few feet away, the drake, whose spine was broken as if he had been thrown backward and hit the wall. Cassia could almost see the blast of force from a human mage that had done it.
She stood and walked around the full length of the platform. There was another skeleton, this one with the oddly lengthened limbs of a sylph, the only godformed who would have been at home in this harsh desert. Their gifts were given from Ais and they lived in Aisen, carefree creatures who cared little for law or borders.
But here, they had stood alongside drakes, and with Cassia’s own people, and they had all been retreating, making a desperate stand both above and below. These fighters had battled mages; the Archpriests below had wrestled gods.
And now Cassia needed to do the same, but with words rather than chains.
She closed her fist over the pebble in her pocket. Mithrinde’s words echoed in her ears. They fear us. They want to annihilate you.
“What will you do after you have your gods back?” she asked.
Iona smiled. The dying sunlight stained her white teeth red. “Take back what was ours. Cleanse the Basin of godformed.”
Her eyes were alight with malice. “Beginning with you. Once you’ve fulfilled your purpose, neither I nor the gods will have any need of you. Perhaps they will give you peace in the beyond. A gift for your great service to humanity.”
Cassia’s heart skipped a beat as the terror of Iona’s vengeful gaze sank into her bones. If Cassia couldn’t control the false ritual, there would be no second chances. She would be too dead to try again.
“I said it before, and I’ll say it again. It was wrong for my father and the other Archpriests to bind your gods,” Cassia said desperately. It was not Iona she needed to persuade to peace — it was Iona’s gods — but she had to try. “But he did it because you were killing us. How can you hate us just for holding a different kind of power?”
Iona’s expression did not change. Cassia spoke faster. “Please, we can fix this without violence. It’s Selach and Ashwythe that’s the problem, not the rest of us. The Treatise was her idea all along, and they tricked us. The drakes are the ones that treat humans badly. We can stop them.”
Iona gave a mocking laugh. “Without violence, you say, but you’re just trying to direct Consequence away from yourself. No. You godformed are abominations glutted on power you don’t deserve. You will feel the wrath of Consequence and you will not live to see more than the first blowing winds of Change. You would have done well to remember your true gods before whoring yourself out to elemental forces.”
She pushed herself away from the pillar and sand from her black tunic and leggings. “But you’ll find it doesn’t matter what I think. Save your pleas for the gods you sealed away and abandoned. It’s time.”
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They led Cassia through the tunnels at the center of a joyous procession. Iona walked in front of Cassia, preceded by four guards dressed in heavily beaded, unfamiliar ceremonial clothing. Iona herself was dressed in a swirl of black and white, each swath layered over each other in thin, lace-like sheets to create a shimmering, shifting grey. She wore a headdress of silver and walked like an Archpriest.
More than a dozen men and women followed them, mages and warriors and the rest of the elite army Iona had brought to secure the Hive. They marched in rhythm, singing in their own language an energetic melody laced with anticipation and punctuated by the thud of their spears against the rock. She didn’t know if Sasha was among them. She didn’t turn to look.
Cassia’s wings were still bound and her hands had been tied again, the ropes rubbing her sore flesh raw. She had already lost three feathers to the chafing. Her heart pounded in time with the spears, though for an entirely different reason. If her plan worked, she would right two great injustices today.
She tried not to think about what would happen if it didn’t. Or how she would face her father if it did, knowing that he’d agreed to the injustice a hundred years before.
No one gave her more than a jeering glance as they walked, twisting deeper into the maze. Cassia’s legs were aching again, but she lifted her chin and walked on. She was certain Iona would only smirk if she fell.
Finally, they halted. Cassia could not see more than a few feet beyond the blazing torchlight. The advance guard parted to let Iona through. One of them handed her a torch. As she stepped forward, the light fell away from the walls and pooled around her. The song swelled to a chorus behind Cassia, resounding in the corridor and echoing out into what had to be an enormous cavern.
Iona gripped the lit torch at either end, brought it down on her knee, and snapped it in two. She threw her hands out and a ring of fire blasted from the broken torch, washing over Iona and into the hall. Cassia stumbled back in shock, but the blast rippled over the warriors in front of her without harm. It faded, but the cavern still glowed with light, a hundred ancient torches all lit at once.
Without looking back, Iona raised her hand and summoned everyone inside.
The cavern soared above Cassia, arching to such a height that even the dozens of torches couldn’t banish the darkness clinging to the ceiling. The chamber itself was cold and largely barren, filled with debris scattered across the smooth stone floor. The torchlight glinted off a small lake on the right, fed by a series of steady trickles down the wall.
If Cassia had expected to find some sort of ornate temple here at the heart of this drake-like network of tunnels, she was disappointed. The only sign of human or godformed presence was the unnaturally smooth floor, and a small raised stone platform on the eastern side of the chamber.
Iona led them to the platform and raised her hand for silence, which fell immediately. She smiled at her posse, a smile more genuine than any she had ever given Cassia.
“My people,” she said, “you have been chosen to witness the birth of a new era. Tonight, we take back what is ours. Tonight, we win.”
She slid off the large satchel on her back and opened it. A pure white glow preceded the Treatise as she took it out of her bag and hoisted the heavy artifact above her head. A great cheer went up from the assembled Seekers. Iona stepped back onto the raised platform and beckoned Cassia.
“Come,” she ordered, her smile hardening to a predatory grin.
The crowd parted. No one pushed her forward, and yet Cassia still had no choice but to go. She went, stepping up onto the platform and letting Iona take her shoulder in a viselike grip. Her legs were numb and there was a strange rushing in her ears.
Five jugs lay in a wide circle on the platform of stone, each unique in shape and beautifully painted. Cassia drew in a sharp breath — the colors and devices of the elemental gods were unmistakable. Valja’s gravel grays and reds, Rayne’s storm grays and light blues, Larisa’s leafy green and yellow, Atlan’s navy and tangled seaweed, and Ais’s tan and white.
There were two gaps in the circle; Selach’s jug was broken. Shards of pottery glazed fiery red and dark obsidian lay strewn across the ground, mixed with slivers of silver and white. Mithrinde’s jug was broken too.
Cassia felt like she had been punched in the gut. She strained to reach into her pocket and touch her still-glowing pebble, but her hands were tied too tightly. Iona, mistaking her movement for an escape attempt, dug her nails deeper into Cassia’s shoulder, hefting the Treatise under her other arm with ease.
“Don’t push me, god-stealer,” Iona spat.
Then she turned more fully and saw the shattered jugs. Her whole body stiffened.
“Who— how—”
Three of the mages had surrounded the platform by now, apparently ready to assist with the false ritual. They were staring openmouthed at the jugs too. One of them looked up at Iona.
“Iona, without each of the powers, we won’t be able to—”
Disquiet rippled through the crowd. Iona shook her head, fierce and proud, cutting across the woman who had spoken. “We’ll manage. Find the largest shards — they should contain most of the power still.”
Cassia stood stock-still as the mages pushed her into the center of the circle, still bound. They made themselves busy, picking up shards and sorting them and setting out candles and incense around the circle to amplify their magic.
Cassia closed her eyes as the power from the jugs pressed against her. She had never felt anything like it before, but of course this must be the containers Mithrinde had mentioned Micah and the others had used in the creation of the Treatise. Evidently pools of that same power still lingered, swollen from years of magic gathering from the empyreal plane.
She couldn’t help but feel it wasn’t a coincidence that Mithrinde’s jug and Selach’s were the ones who had shattered. It felt like the death knell for their little mission, that unlikely partnership that had survived so much, and had almost won. She was sure that by now Fyn’s body was lying somewhere in the gorge, either dead by dehydration or killed by mages lying in wait when he returned from wherever he had gone that fateful night Cassia was captured.
She knew he was dead and not just fled for one simple reason: Fyn might abandon her at the flap of a wing, but he could not abandon the Treatise and his mission. So he must be… gone.
She gritted her teeth as Fyn’s stupid grin flashed in her mind’s eye, a memory of his expression when she had handed him that meat skewer in Larisen. Her gut twisted. For a time, Cassia had almost thought they could be friends. Before Fyn had decided that whatever lay between them, his duty to his horrible god was more important.
If only she could have helped him more. Who said he had to go back, after all this was over? He could have come to MIthrinden, met Tilana, seen what service to a deity should actually look like. The image of Fyn walking the soaring halls of the Lunasium was at once bizarrely out of place and beautiful.
Not that he would have ever agreed to come.
Iona’s hand gripped Cassia’s shoulder and shoved her a step backward, startling Cassia back to the moment. The other mages had assembled the pottery shards into two rough puzzles, both set at the correct place in the circle of powers. Iona had centered Cassia in the circle and placed the Treatise at her feet. Now she and the other mages took a step back, down from the raised dais, and lifted their hands.
For a brief, pure second of panic, Cassia considered running. They hadn’t bound her legs. She could get fifty feet away at least before they caught her, assuming she didn’t trip. Then Iona and the other mages started chanting, and Cassia’s limbs froze in place.
The false ritual had begun.
The chant was low and threatening. Cassia’s eyes, the only part of her she could move, flicked back and forth between Iona and the mage next to her. Even though she knew what they were trying to do, and knew what she had to do, white-hot fear licked up her spine as Iona’s hands glowed a deep orange.
The chant built, rising to a crescendo, the magic somehow in tone and rhythm and not words, entirely unlike the true ritual Micah had taught her years ago, and yet somehow eerily similar, as if each word was changed just enough so it was no longer a word, only a meaningless collection of twisted, still-magical sound.
Iona swept her hands upwards and the jugs around Cassia blazed with multicolored light. The power rose out of them in twisted ropes, barely visible as faint streaks in the air but heavy with weight against Cassia’s chest. Her lungs burned but the fear at the base of her skull screamed at her to keep her mouth closed rather than gasp and let the power drown her. It pushed against her skin, six different alien magics, and her own magic rose as a shield but already the powers were battering it away…
The chant broke into the final shouted words, the sacred words Micah had whispered to her at the Giving Pool when she received her mote and was taken into tryst as the Archpriest’s daughter. These words alone were whole and pure, but they fell sullied and dirty on Cassia’s ears, tainted by the intent with which they were spoken.
“Ayenta encelta aes!” As one, we author peace.
Silence fell like a stone into water. At Cassia’s feet, the Treatise stirred, the clouded white inside swirling into a vortex that glowed brighter by the second. Iona’s hands were still raised high, ready with a motion to force the power from the jugs into Cassia.
Their eyes met. Iona smiled at Cassia’s terror. She tilted her hand.
And the ground underneath Cassia collapsed into crumbled rock.
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Hi, Mea! Here is your daily review :3 Let's jump right in.
I'll start off with my line comments and give more general impressions after ^^
I quote both of these lines because the phrase "set her jaw/face" is used twice less than a paragraph apart, which isn't a big deal, but I feel like one of them can be something a bit better/more expressive of how Cassia is feeling. Is she just trying to remain completely neutral or is she sneaking in some more defiant looks?
This description was unclear to me. The use of "wide stair" instead of "wide stairway" confused me for a bit, because I thought it meant there was a crack in one of the individual stairs. I also didn't have a clear visual of how this opened up to the top of the spire. Was there like an overhang shadowing the stairs and she stepped out onto a platform, or was the stairs just a hole in the floor, and Iona stopped a couple of stairs down to let Cassia up? I think this could be a stronger, more clear description to transition into her looking out over the spire.
[Also, the phrase "in the lee of a pillar" was used twice when she found the skeletons, and that's not a really common phrase so it threw me off.]
It took me a while to figure out what Iona was talking about here, because I didn't know if "they" referred to the drakes or their gods? It's kind of vague still, so I'm not totally sure.
Did she just change? <.< >.> I noticed the time skip, but did Iona just take Cassia out to show her the top of the spire, just to leave her on her own again to start the ceremony? Story wise, I get it, and it could just be me nitpicking, but it just doesn't make sense logistically in my head xD
Also, once Cassia saw that the two jars that were broken was Mithrinde's and Selach's, she started thinking about how Fyn is dead, which felt a bit odd to me. We, the reader, know that Fyn was responsible for breaking the pots, and Cassia even points out that it's likely not a coincidence, but then she immediately concludes that Fyn is dead. Why did she think of Fyn if she doesn't think he did it? Who else would have broken it -- because clearly Iona is surprised that it's broken, meaning someone did it, and none of her goons would do that. I get that it's supposed to be dramatic, but I felt like we skipped a couple of her thoughts, like her asking "oh could Fyn be here? No, that seems unlikely. But who?" kind of thing. Rather than just jumping to ignoring the fact that they were broken.
I also feel like it ultimately doesn't matter that the pots got broken xD Like that felt like a way bigger deal to me than it was. So... why did Selach get so pissed at Fyn?
[Related to Cassia's thought, why didn't Iona wait for Fyn to get back and kill him? She knew that he was still there? Why would she risk Fyn doing something else to muck up her plans instead of just taking care of him right away?]
So please inform me, what does she have to do? I mean, we know that she is theoretically supposed to hijack the ritual to break one part of the Treastise but not the other, but how is she supposed to do that? At no point does it ever feel like there is a plan when she feels slightly (admittedly not very, which is valid xD) confident that she has a plan, if that makes sense? Mithrinde implied that because she knew the words of the ritual that she could do something, but it felt like if Fyn hadn't been there to swoop her away, she wasn't going to be able to do anything. What was the plan? xD
Didn't Cassia not get a mote? Also, isn't Tilana the heir? It's not ever been really clear how them being the daughters of the Archpriest lined up in the story, but it seemed like Tilana got most of the Archpriest training, while Cassia took after her mom. Did he just teach them both? Why was it important for Cassia to know?
Last thing is that I wanted to know more about what Cassia is thinking throughout the ritual. Granted, we do see her emotion through her fear and anticipation, but this kind of goes back to my earlier point about how vague her "plan" was. Was she mentally preparing to intervene somehow? Or perhaps is she realizing that she's in over her head? That this plan she thought she could do she in fact couldn't do? Enamored by the ritual and overwhelmed by the magic? I'd like to see a bit more of her input on what's coming next, at least as the ritual is ramping up, since I also get you don't want to bog down the intensity with too much inner monologue.
Overall, I liked this part. Honestly, it wasn't especially a favorite of mine (and I skimmed a bit <.< ) because this felt like a big, intense slow build chapter to what we already knew was going to happen -- ie, Fyn saving Cassia. Which isn't bad! It's a good and necessary section, but I was more interested in seeing what happens after Fyn tunnels in, haha, which pulled my attention away a bit.
I did like that this part really revealed the sinister side of Iona. I liked the way that you've built her character up, how she started a freedom fighter that the reader could almost sympathize with, and then revealed more and more how actually power hungry and radical she is. It's done very well and makes her a really engaging, interesting antagonist. And admittedly, since I've read on, I know where it's going so it makes this set up even better. Good job on that
I'm honestly just excited to read on haha. So hopefully some of my points here were helpful! Let me know if you have any questions. ^^
Happy writing!
~ Wolfe
Shoot, that bit about the mote is a holdover from the first draft where Cassia did have a mote lol, I thought I'd gotten all of those. >.<
And oh, Selach actually got mad at Fyn before he broke the jugs. Which is actually meant to imply something about how/why the jugs broke, so I'll probably need to take another look at that.
I really appreciate all the questions about logistics here, it definitely lets me know what I need to explain better in the narrative!
re: Selach getting angry. I worded that question wrong xD So, yeah I remember that he got upset because Fyn was lingering too long on the one pot that was supposedly his, and then made Fyn break them. But if it is his pot, then why did Selach get very angry and make him do it? Am I missing something? xD
Ah yes, there is definitely a Reason for that that isn't necessarily supposed to be super clear right now but has to do with what exactly is in the jug haha
Hi Mea,

Mailice here with a short review!
I like your introduction paragraph. It gives a good summary of what happened with Cassia and also describes in excellent words how she feels about it and how she has gained new confidence.
I liked how Iona acted a bit different in the cell as she did in chapter 16, she was more stern and serious and I think that also has to do with her being on the verge of what she wants to achieve. Iona is a perfect antagonist and yet charismatic in the way she shows herself. She has this conviction of being in the right and also doesn't show the weaknesses she has at all. I loved the moment when she brought Cassia into the room with the skeletons. It had left a chill down my spine because it was described so simply and directly.
The first half with Cassia was a very interesting piece as it once again showed this unfair treatment and the superiority of Iona. I liked that Cassia kept trying to persuade Iona a bit, but also thought that the subsequent change to the next half came a bit too abruptly. I really expected something more, but it was like the scene change in a film where the picture went black. Whereby I don't really know how it should have continued.
I like the way you describe the whole procession and yet I have the impression that it's only the top layer that you're scratching here and not the rest. For a kind of climax to the story, I think you could describe a bit more about how the people looked, or at what pace they moved, or whether Cassia hears any words coming out. What feelings does she feel during the singing? You've always managed to incorporate a little bit of the world into your descriptions, giving vividness even to places you've only seen once. I found it a little too rushed here. I also found it a shame that you didn't see very much of Cassia here. How did she feel? What desperation was going through her head?
What I did like, however, was how Cassia was more in focus later before the false ritual and how she reflected a lot and also thought about Fyn for the first time. I thought this was a good moment as I think it reflects that point well, that she herself is facing the problems more here. You also did a good job of describing how Cassia feels and what she feels when the false ritual begins. I thought it was a good ending to the chapter with a good cliffhanger too. I can't really imagine the torment Cassia suffered, but from the last part, I can understand the fear she felt when she was captured.
Other points that stood out to me:
I would add another comma after the "the stale air".
I think there should be a comma after the "to do" as well.
I like this "relapse" after a "beautiful dream", where the bad memories come back.
I think there should be a "was" instead of "were" or the "man" should become "men".
Ouch! That hurts just imagining it. Poor Cassia.
Iona as an antagonist is truly diabolical. And I kinda like that.
I like the description that you give here some more information about her clothes.
I don't know why, but I like the sentence here. It's so short and simple yet effective and good.
It was a great chapter. You had a good build up and created a clear descent of how Cassia felt and how the story will develop too. I really expected Fyn to jump out of some hole at any moment. Or is he even responsible for the hole where Cassia falls through at the end? Hm...
Have fun writing!
Mailice
Hey there! Plume here, with a review!
Ahhh, so we finally begin the renewal! Well, kind of, cause Fyn burst in. (I assume so, at least.) I really liked how this chapter really had the vibe of doomsday to it. This is what you've been building up to so long, and now that it's here, it's probably going to be a major turning point. We're basically in the climax now, and gah that feels so unreal.
One thing I really enjoyed about this chapter was the plot. I think one of the parts in this was when Iona took Cassia to see the skeletons and their little exchange there. It was very dramatic, and the scene setting was impeccable. It was very... cinematic, in a way. And symbolic. I especially think Iona's line about the angel and drake together in death was striking (fingers crossed it's not foreshadowing). I think Cassia's pleading to Iona was also pretty powerful. Before, I could kind of see why Iona was bitter, but I think this really did solidify her as a more sinister/evil character. She's bent on revenge and being stamped down and oppressed, and she only sees one solution where the godformed are completely eradicated.
I'm super curious to see what's coming! I know Cassia had a plan to try and talk to the gods and reason with them, but it seems like Fyn has interrupted that. The renewal/breaking can't be done without Cassia though, and with her gone, can it still continue? Is she still in some sort of bond with the ceremony? A lot of stuff could happen, and I'm waiting eagerly in anticipation!
Specifics
I really loved your usage of the phrase "burning cold." The oxymoron it has works really well to display the cool but intense gaze that Iona has, and it's a fun little bit of wordplay.
Ah, I was wondering whether Fyn's little interaction with the jugs would interrupt the ceremony. It doesn't seem like they did, other than rattling Iona. But still, I liked this part cause you closed up something my brain had been wondering.
Overall: really nice work! This chapter definitely captured the tense mood that was needed for something like this, and it set up the next section super well. Until next time!!