Hello! Team Aqua has come for a review! I'm going to go through the nitpicks first, so here goes...
Must be nice to be so nonchalant
Not even aware
I think it would sound better if you changed the second line to /And/ not even aware.
So she couldn't ever get out
So she could never get out might be better.
Okay, now I tell you how much I loved this bit...
Instead, she relied on her many collections
That no-one would ever read or keep
It's really relatable. So many of us won't be published. It will just be us and our beautiful collection of words.
Nice job.
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