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Pray

by MasterGrieves


Let us pray.
Pray for the women,
for the children,
for all those with pain.

Let us pray.
Pray for our own sake,
for the losers,
for that one request.

Let us pray.
Pray for the masses,
for the loners,
for the one sole aim.

Faith is odd.
Faith just makes me cry.
Copy and paste,
words from that big book.

Let us pray.
Pray that we will win,
pray that we lose,
pray things do improve.


So, let us pray.


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Thu Dec 26, 2013 11:44 am
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Renard says...



Gawd this is miserable isn't it?!

Loners and losers and crying.

I hope things do improve, because after reading this it doesn't make me want to pray it makes me want to scream. XD

This is dark and deep. And quite frankly depressing.

No hope to be found here. :(

Good writing though. ;)




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Cailey says...



Like Demib said, it isn't quite my style. Personally I would have liked it to flow better and hold some more detail, but it was good. And, yes, prayer is an important tool and does work, despite the criticism of the world.




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demib says...



I like it. Not my style but it has a very nice flow and thoughts.




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Deanie says...



Ajt!

I think this poem is really interesting. The idea I got from it was that you wanted things to improve in the world. That you wanted to pray for everything.

I don't really see any grammar mistakes and I like the end line.

Deanie x





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