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I Am No Whore

by MasterGrieves


"Oh, Jenny! The way you lay in my bed!
With all of those dirty thought, inside your head!
Tell me more! Oh please, tell me so much more!"-
"Before you ask me, no I am no whore."

-"But you have the look, you have the figure,
You have a passion that fuels fire quicker!
And your lips; they drive me out of the door!"
"Yeah, well no need for that. I am no whore."

-"I think you are worth, more money than me!
Your agency is great, so lovely to see.
You've grown up fast, and done it without law!"
"Do you listen to me? I am no whore."

-"Remember underneath the iron bridge?
Where you gave that man a longlasting kiss?
I want you to do it, all over this door."
"Hah, don't mock me you fool. I am no whore."

-"Just like the old days, just like the bright eyes,
that seem to glimmer, fade into the skies.
You don't mind do you, to bring love galore?"
"Well I could, but I won't. I am no whore."

-"You could do me all night; twice, maybe thrice!
Please say you serve the same customer twice!"
"Dear boy, you're scared- there's something you've ignored:
I have morals and rights- I am no whore."


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Thu Feb 23, 2012 3:55 pm
Lashea says...



This was amazing I loves this so much it was amazing




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Wed Feb 22, 2012 1:46 am
demib says...



Oh my gods I didnt even realize this was you until a clicked on it and I read Mikko's response and i was wondering "husband?" Getting back on subject, I am probably to young to read this... ( naughty child) but i really can't say much about it. It's a good poem and all, but im not one for poem like this. Dont get me wrong it is an exellent poem. Keep writing,AJ! ( why did you get rid of that hot guy?! i liked that picture!)




567ajt says...


To replace it with another hot guys ;)



demib says...


Lol i guess thats true!



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Tue Feb 21, 2012 9:17 pm
Mikko says...



Oh my goodness, husband, I like this. like, a lot. I like the rhyme and... how light is sounds eventhough it's quite a heavy subject. I believe this "light" effect is achieved brilliantly with the male character whom you've managed to potray as a slightly comical sex-freak. Well, not really a freak but this is clearly harassement. xD

I like your female character's response. Yeah, I know, you must see me as some feminist "preacher" or whatnot but I'm a girl, and I truly apeciate women who have the strength to stand up to men who want to ... you know...

There's just one tiny thing I thought you should touch up on:

"Oh, Jenny! The way you lay in my bed!
With all of those dirty thought, inside your head!
Tell me more! Oh please, tell me so much more!"-
"Before you ask me, no I am no whore."


"Thought" there needs an "s".

That's all. I really liked it, just like I like all your work.

Love you, husband. <3





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