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Big Creatures

by MasterGrieves


They tower over me
They're so goddamn big
Larger than I had
Originally thought
Someone says to me
"You better run, sir"
Of course I have to run
From the big creatures

Some curiosity
Kills momentum
I have to run
Kills momentum

Some curiosity
Kills momentum
I have to run
From the big creatures

They tower over me
They're so goddamn big
Larger than I had
Originally thought
Someone says to me
"You better run, sir"
Of course I have to run
From the big creatures


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Renard wrote a review...



Hello.
XD
Compared to some of your later works this could be seen as rather immature, but on the same note, the childlike nature of the song is what I find endearing about it. XD

Some curiosity
Kills momentum
I have to run
Kills momentum


You do this sort of thing now in your more recent works, so it's interesting to see what patterns you follow in your writing. XD

On the whole, this work marks the foundation of your writing voice:

"You better run, sir"
Including speech in your writing is a trademark of your style. As an elementary work, I liked this one. :)

Love you. :D




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KylaThompson wrote a review...



Hello, my name is Kyla and I'm new to YWS. Just here leaving you a review. I like it, I think it is nice. I was a little confused though why it had repetition though. I was also a little thrown off by your punctuation too. I still like it though, I will have to read and review more from you! :)




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Tue Sep 04, 2012 11:50 am
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I like its symmetry. although it's the same thing that makes you practically read it twice without actually intending to do so. so by the time I finished reading it twice, I had practically read it four times haha. funny!

not enough for me to review on this one. maybe it's just a glimpse of something bigger?




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Bobbywalker says...



Friggin cool dude! Love this one xD That project of yours is awesome!





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