Hello Jaybird!
Jaybird wrote: walking over autumn leaves in forgotten forests
in search of the monsters
underneath suburban beds.
just the wilderness, two brothers
and a notebook messy with the
notes of the one who came before.
As I have watched many episodes of Supernatural, I particularly enjoy this opening stanza. One thing I would recommend overall would be involving some sort of capitalization, but that's a stylistic preference thing, which I am unsure of what you were aiming for.
I love the message and the interpretation of the series in your second stanza, but I do have one question; How far into the show are we talking about here? And do you think they ever really left their roots to begin with?
Lastly, I love the incorporation you used of "wayward sons" as that was very creative.
Suggestions
The only thing I really suggest here would be in order to make your poem flow a bit more would be the capitalization.
Overall
Ultimately, this poem is really nice and it flows well, and I would love to see some more poems or even stories written about Supernatural in your further work.
Happy Writing,
SBG
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