Wow! Very interesting.
I wouldn't change the first stanza, at all. Maybe, in the second one, you could say 'That I am whole, that if I act like I am shining inside, you know the light will reflect off of you', or something like that, a bit like he/she is stealing your light, if you know what I mean. Third stanza - amazing!
Last stanza, I would say it's a bit confusing - first you're a rock, then a plant. But keep up the good work!
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