Hi! Pentavalence here with a review.
You're obviously really talented and I know next to nothing about poetry, so I can't find much to criticize.
The lines "but I swear that this is the last time // this is the last time and i will burn your prints" didn't flow as well as the others. The repeated use of the words 'this is the last time', intentional or not, made it sound a bit stilted.
Also, "and the smell of oils won't" made me think of watercolor oils, but it also occurred to me that it could be olive oil or something like that. You might want to clarify that.
Anyway, that's all I could find. I love your work, keep writing!
-Pentavalence
Points: 133
Reviews: 45
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