Young Writers Society

Hi Lullaby! Valkyria here leaving a quick review for your lovely work! So let's get into it:

I really like how you used quicksand as a metaphor for struggling through life. In nature, quicksand is really slow to pull people under, so it's lengthy process to get themselves out. It's a nice nod to that in your poem. Then we come to the romance element. It's sweet how that person helped you and how you two connected. I love the imagery with the fallen stars. I also like how the poem stays realistic. It's not a struggle anymore, but those grains of sand are still there.

Such a lovely read. Well done!

Hi, Lullaby! It's surprising to see that no one's reviewed this yet! I really enjoy your poems, so let's dive in:

The Good Stuff
- The figurative language in this is amazing!
- I like how this entire poem was a bit of a metaphor- like how the 'quicksand' is the struggles of life or just parts of life that you've never found joy in, and I think that metaphors in poems like this are always an interesting concept.
- I also just wanna say I love all of these romance poems you write <3

Room For Improvement
- I don't think there's anywhere to improve. You did a really great job here! (Maybe you could make a long poem, tho- I would love to read it!)

Overall Opinion
- I've always thought that these poems were as elegant and beautiful as you seem to be, and I can say no different about this one. It was great!

Happy writing, and have a blessed day!

Serrurie