Young Writers Society

Awe, this poem is tender, short, sweet, and feels like a safe hug. Only six lines, but I feel like we go through an entire lifetime of love in this poem.

I search for his eyes in every corner of the world
A gaze so prominent in expression, of hurt and love

I feel like this poem could be about a person, or maybe a poem about God or goodness or love in the world. Or about someone that you love very dearly. I love how you didn't only focus on love, but you also reference the coexistence of hatred along with love. Because really, what if goodness without opposition? I found that you did a really great job with describing and emotion words. Your vocabulary is fantastic when it comes to describing depth and degrees of feeling.

When his eyes find mine, everything falls into place
Then, I know for sure, that I will be safe and comforted

Like I said, these lines are so tender. The simplicity is strong here, but it is so strong that it really fortifies your words and makes them so easy to read and feel grateful. This poem makes me grateful for love and friends. It also makes me excited for even more love in the future. I appreciate you sharing this little poem <33 Overall, I loved this and cant wait to read more.

Your friend,
Ellie

Hello! Ley here to review this amazing work for you. Today, I will be using my 'Summer Themed Review Template'! I will start with opening statements, highlight and summarize my favorite parts, note areas that could be improved, and then give you my closing statement! I hope you find this review helpful, and I hope you're having a wonderful Summer, if that's the season wherever you are in the world! Let's get into it!

A Warm Welcome
I'm a huge fan of short, but emotionally deep and transverse poems-- and you didn't fail to amaze me with this one! I loved the simplicity, how you were able to get your point across without overcrowding the poem. Let's get into the detais!

Sunny Moments

A gaze so prominent in expression, of hurt and love
Eyes that hold both the light and mystery of depth

This was absolutely my favorite two lines in the whole poem (besides the last line, of course). The way you annotated to this person's eyes throughout the whole poem lets off an ethereal yet comforting theme. I love the fact that you kept coming back to it, as it was very clearly the focus of the poem. I think we all have people that make us feel the same way, and it came off super relatable to me. Eyes are said to be the way into the soul, and you captured that perfectly with this poem. Amazing job!

Heat and Haze
I don't have any critiques on this poem. Usually, I don't critique poems because it's an art form, and it's all up to perception of the reader and author. But either way, I wouldn't change one thing about this poem! <3

Overall Vibes
Overall, this was a comforting and relatable poem-- it caught my attention right away. I loved your word choices, the way you describes this person's eyes and connected it throughout the whole poem. It was truly a lovely read. I hope to read more poems like this in the future from you! I hope you have a lovely day.

Hey, it's Serrurie, here to leave a review! Let's dive in:

There isn't much to say about this poem, but everything I do have to say about it is good. Your writing is very elegant (like you!) and this really gives me butterflies. You have a way of making people feel comfort in your writing. I would suggest ending this with a period, but that's it! I haven't read your poems, but I will definitely be reading more after this!

Happy writing, and have a blessed day!

Serrurie