I loved the essence of this poem, it's beautiful and relatable.
The way the lines break up breaks the flow a little bit and makes it a bit harder to read. It reads like sentences that are just divided half way through, which breaks the flow slightly.
Personally, I'd phrase "sweetly they | sing your name" as "they sing your | name sweetly", because I think it flows better, although that's just my opinion.
However, I did love the poem. The imagery is spot on, and conveys emotions well. I like the way the last stanza is two lines instead of three, as it feels like a conclusion.
The imagery is sweet and innocent, I especially like the lines
"flowers picked in the courtyard for the
someone leaning on you"
I like how the poem answers a question. it comes full circle from "not sure if this is something you can feel" to "it's what you feel", which is quite poignant, and gives the poem a sense of completeness.
I also like the idea that this is a "love poem", but not based on romantic love, as it is sometimes difficult to express non-romantic love well.
This is a beautiful poem
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