If the sun is gold
And the moon is silver
Then what do you call the stars?
Can you really just call them white?
I'd expect a more shimmery, glimmery color
For something as hopeful and bright.
I love the simplicity of the poem! It's sweet and simple, yet you manage to deliver a point/idea. There are so many things you can write about the stars. Their wonder is infinite. Thanks for sharing! ^_^
Hi! This is awesome. I feel your creativity is great.I feel this is logical as well. I feel this short, sweet and well written. I like that last line so much. If you expand this, it would be even more amazing.As a nature lover, I felt drawn towards the title and I loved this. I think this was worth sharing.Would love to read more of your works!From:Bhavya
This was really cute! It almost had the same vibe as the little rhyme "star light, star bright, first star I see tonight..." I think you have the choice to expand this, and to go into deeper imagery about what the color of stars really is. I love the little rhyme; it gives this work such a whimsical quality that I quite enjoy. Great job!
I apologize in advance for the really short review considering that it's a very short poem. I think this is a really great and short poem. Very straightforward, straight to the point. I love how you question the stars and the reader because it's like you are trying to get the reader's perspective on the topic. Though for the description, I think you could go into a little more detail as of what color the sun is, what color the moon is and more like, Identification?Overall I love the poem!
This is a really short and sweet poem! It’s very straightforward and I like the contemplative voice of the narrator. Good job!
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