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The Daughter of War - Chapter 12: Temptation

by Ley


Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language.

Chapter 12: Temptation

Josephine must’ve underestimated her teleportation abilities, because when she opened her eyes, they were not in Asclepius’ keep. Instead, they were in the Grande Hall. Persephone struggled to rise to her feet. It took them a few seconds to process where exactly in the Grande Hall they were.

A lady sat in the corner of the room, folding clothes and gowns and suits. Her eyes were wide as she looked at the two girls. She was dressed head to toe in a black maid’s outfit, her hair was pulled back into a neat bun. Josephine looked at her friend who was somehow recovering. There must’ve been something, a healing property, that was magically laced into the grounds of Olympus. No wonder Josephine’s mother always told her to stay within the gates of their home.

Persephone flashed a quick smile at the woman, her shirt stained with blood and her eye black from Hermes’ blow, “We apologize. We were sparring and… things got a little out of control.”

The lady’s eyes flickered to Josephine, who’s outfit was now completely scorched. The woman opened her mouth to speak, but instead, a male voice sounded from the hallway behind them, “I wouldn’t speak to them if I were you, Judith. They have trouble written all over them.”

The girls spun around to find a man who looked around their ages standing in the entryway, his hands locked behind his back and a grin painted across his face, “Hello, girls. I’ve been meaning to find you, but I searched and searched and searched… to no avail. I was informed by Theseus that you two were… what did he say… ill.”

Josephine had never seen someone more handsome than the specimen standing in front of them. His eyes were a cloudy gray, and his stark-black hair was styled perfectly. His lean build was inviting, almost as inviting as his dimpled smile and picture-perfect teeth. A scar ran from his neck to his chin. His pale skin was almost ghastly and reminded her of the moon at night—when it’s most stunning. He seemed to notice Josephine admiring him, so he winked in her direction and leaned against the doorframe. Asshole.

“What do you want, Jase?” Persephone groaned, rolling her eyes.

Persephone and Jase were familiar with each other more than she’d like. They attended the same alternative school, and he was always her competition. She loathed him with everything she had and vowed at the young age of twelve to take him down one day. Jase was also a mentor of the Trials for one of the sons of Poseidon and had won the Trials two years in a row. This was this third run before he ran for Olympus Council in the Summer.

“I was actually looking for your friend,” Jase kept his eyes locked on Josephine, “I believe she could be of…assistance.”

Josephine gulped. The woman who was sitting in the corner had disappeared without them knowing, leaving her curious as to where she’d went when she glanced behind her. Hopefully, she didn’t go telling Zeus.

“Josephine,” Persephone said, “do you know this man?”

Josephine shook her head. No, she didn’t know this man. But she was pretty sure she’d like to. She wanted to know every inch of him, every secret, everything he could do to her—

“Let the girl speak, Seph,” Jase chuckled, his smile growing even wider. What did this man have over Josephine? Why was she frozen?

“Shut up,” Persephone grabbed her friend’s hand and tried to walk past her enemy, “We have places to be.”

Jase was like a large boulder. He stepped in each direction the girls did, leaving Persephone to sigh heavily and curse to Tartarus. She glared in Jase’s direction.

“It’s fine, Persephone,” Josephine said, lightly smiling, “I’m a fire-breathing bitch, remember? I think I can handle it myself. I’ll see you later.”

Persephone huffed and stalked out of the room, shooting Josephine a stare on her way out. Josephine wasn’t sure why Persephone didn’t want anything to do with Jase, but everything about her friend was a mystery. She didn’t open up much, and Josephine definitely wasn’t the type to push people.

“Follow me to my room,” Jase purred as he led Josephine away from the laundry room and into the long, stretching corridor.

Josephine didn’t respond and instead focused on how tall he was. She imagined climbing him, testing the waters just a little bit...

They reached his door in a matter of minutes. His room didn’t look like hers at all—it was dark and gloomy, with hints of crimson and gold laced throughout the room in light décor pieces. The red curtains were pulled back so that the light from the moon shined directly in, leaving a dimmed circular pattern on his California King bed. A liquor catty stayed positioned next to the brick fireplace—ranging from bourbon to whiskey to the finest of Dionysus’ cabernets. His room looked like a sexualized torture dungeon.

“I assume you’re wondering why I need use of you,” Jase said as he poured two glasses of some brown alcohol into two crystallized bar glasses. Josephine didn’t drink, but after today, she just wanted to forget.

She spent her whole life begging the universe for a gift. Begging for some type of recognition, approval, and anything of that nature. Today, the Gods granted her that prayer, and she wanted nothing to do with it. When the Big Twelve finds out about her power, they could deem it too powerful, and exile her for it; regardless of who her parents are. She needed to keep this on the down low, and she hoped that Persephone agreed.

“Yes.”

Jase handed her the drink, “I’ve been watching you, and I’m quite impressed. The only problem is, you haven’t demonstrated a gift, and that intrigues me.”

Josephine nodded and took the drink. She took a large sip and sat back into the cushion of the chair she took a seat in, “And who are you, Jase? Why does my friend not enjoy your company?”

He chuckled and sat on the coffee table a few feet from her, “Persephone and I have a past. She was my competitor growing up. But… we shouldn’t allow the past to effect the future, right, daughter of Ares?”

Josephine held the glass on her thigh and studied him, “Let me guess. You’re of Hades.”

“No, no, no,” He made a face as if he was genuinely disgusted by her words, “Jase Vitalis. Poseidon.”

“Poseidon?” Josephine grinned, “How strange. I would’ve never guessed you were a son of the ocean and skies based on your… depressing exterior. Huh, who would’ve thought?”

Jase didn’t seem amused. The smirk on his face disappeared, “I’ve won this competition two years in a row, darling. I think my depressing exterior works just fine for me. I have a proposition for you, and before you say no, hear me out.”

Josephine pursed her lips, sitting up in her seat, “I’m listening, Waterboy.” If he wanted something from her, he needed to work for it. She also wouldn’t mind watching that handsome face beg.

He rolled his eyes and stood up. He started pacing the room, the drink in his hand moving back and forth with every footstep he took, “I have a rare gift,” he started, “Not only can I control and manipulate water, but I follow after my mother with the gift of controlling the moon’s phases and necromancy. I enjoy shape shifting as well—but I’d rather not. It’s uncomfortable to shift back and be butt naked.”

Josephine’s eyes narrowed. Who could his mother be? What goddess can control the moon’s phases and also has the gift of necromancy?

Then it hit her.

Hecate.

Jase was a child of Hecate and Poseidon. What an odd mixture. It only left Josephine wondering what Poseidon wanted with the goddess of witchcraft, but that was a question for another time.

“Your point?” Josephine spat.

“My point is that I think you’re just like me. I think you’re going to inherit two gifts. If we work together, we’d be unstoppable.”

“And what makes you think that I’ll inherit two gifts?” Josephine asked, her stomach churning. The one gift she did discover, she didn’t even inherit. Neither Aphrodite nor Ares wielded fire.

“Because I discovered my gifts late too.”

“You won the Trials without knowing your gift? Twice?

“Don’t act so surprised. Years of combat training and spellcasting with my witch mother was more than enough to win,” Jase scoffed, stopping in his tracks. He turned to Josephine, “Why do you ask? Are you unsure of yourself?”

Josephine looked at the floor and played with her fingers, “How do I know I can trust you, Jase?”

He hesitated, but walked over to her and bent down so that he was sitting on his calves, “I don’t know what Persephone has told you, but I’m not like that anymore. These Trials are different. There are new competitors, ones with capabilities I’ve never seen before. This year, things will be different, and all three of us will die if we don’t stick together.”

“Are you saying that you want to team up with Persephone, too? Why couldn’t she come, then?”

“I assumed she’d automatically shut me down,” Jase frowned, “If I talked to you first, maybe there would be a chance that you’d convince her.”

Josephine sighed and contemplated his advice. Could she really trust him, or was this all a scheme to get them to let their guard down? Not only that, but Josephine had never seen Jase before. She was pretty sure he was a mentor, so how could he even be participating in the Trials? Although, if he does wield both gifts like he says he does, he could possibly be their strongest weapon.

Or greatest enemy. She shuddered internally at the thought.

His stone-gray eyes looked into hers and she was more than inclined to say yes. But this wasn’t a decision for her to make. Her loyalty was with Persephone. The most she could do was voice her opinion.

“I see what you’re saying, and I’m not saying no,” Josephine said, “But this also doesn’t mean yes. I need to talk to Persephone first.”

“Hey, all I ask is that you think about it. The next Trial is tomorrow, and from what I’ve heard, it’s a group theme. Ask Persephone if she’d be willing to group up.”

Josephine downed the rest of her drink. It went down her throat and into her stomach with a burn. She got to her feet, stretching. She just remembered that she was still in charred clothing, so her face blushed and she covered her almost-bare chest with her hands, “I-uh. I will. I should probably get back to my room and get some sleep. Thanks for the… drink.”

She felt his eyes on her problem area and his smirk grew back, once again causing her to feel warm in places that she had no business being warm in, “Thank you. Have a great rest of your night, darling.”

Josephine nodded and slowly turned to the door, nudging the handle with her tired fingers.

“Oh,” Jase growled, “and by the way, I think burnt clothing suits you. Really brings out your eyes.”

Josephine couldn’t help but blush even harder, but she didn’t turn around. Instead, a smile grew on her face, and she left his view.

When she got to her room, she closed the door and leaned against the hard frame, closing her eyes. She didn’t know what she just got herself into. But she knew one thing:

Jase Vitalis was going to be the death of her. 


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Hello again! ~ Writing Commentary

Josephine had never seen someone more handsome than the specimen standing in front of them. His eyes were a cloudy gray, and his stark-black hair was styled perfectly. His lean build was inviting, almost as inviting as his dimpled smile and picture-perfect teeth. A scar ran from his neck to his chin. His pale skin was almost ghastly and reminded her of the moon at night—when it’s most stunning. He seemed to notice Josephine admiring him, so he winked in her direction and leaned against the doorframe. Asshole.


Jase reminds me of the one kid who is better at everything than everyone, and revels in it! This description and his wink towards Josephine does a great job of immediately characterizing him!

Josephine shook her head. No, she didn’t know this man. But she was pretty sure she’d like to. She wanted to know every inch of him, every secret, everything he could do to her—


The newfound confidence Josephine feels when in Jase’s presence (“fire-breathing bitch”, anyone?) is an interesting caveat to her character, it is somewhat unexpected due to her previous aversion to romantic relationships, maybe I interpreted wrong. I have seen you comment about feeling like she’s a bit of a “crybaby”, so it is understandable that you may want a way to make her stray from that trait a bit.

Love and…Love ~ Story Commentary

What a great introduction to our newest character! I like how the story now continues to charge along into the next trial! It really goes to show how chaotic Josephine’s life has become.

Jase is a great and interesting character to throw in the mix. To guess, it seems like he serves two purposes, he greatly increases the diversity of the main characters (as well as the world!) all while creating future character drama with the two girls. Persphone hates her while Josephine has taken a liking to him.

I am a bit confused with why Josephine has taken quite the liking to Jase due to this quote I pulled from chapter 6.

Josephine had never touched a man, let alone let a man touch her. She’d never been interested in what people called love—her mother taught her at a young age that love comes with lust and drama and submission. Just the thought of allowing men to gawk at her made Josephine want to throw up.


I only include this because with this in mind, it makes Jase’s alluring nature feel somewhat forced, but I am all open to a romance sprouting!

I-Is it getting hot in here? ~ Closer

Great introduction to an interesting character! I don’t want it to seem like I don’t like this plot point, because the potential for drama is all there! Isn’t that what we, as writers truly care about?




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Two things.

“I’m a fire-breathing bitch, remember?"

This was so funny! XD

She also wouldn’t mind watching that handsome face beg.

WOAH there, Josephine. I see it's getting a little spicy here. :eyes:

This was such a fun chapter and an excellent introduction to our newest character! (He scares me, ngl)




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You%u2019ll grow to like him, I promise! XD



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Keep Your Eyes Peeled - My Reactions
Alright, I'll be changing things up a bit and replacing "My Interpretation" with "My Reactions" because I like giving reactions. =P

Josephine must’ve underestimated her teleportation abilities, because when she opened her eyes, they were not in Asclepius’ keep. Instead, they were in the Grande Hall.

Well, I'd say that's still pretty good! At least they're both in one piece and they weren't teleported halfway across the world, haha.

We were sparring and… things got a little out of control.”

Mhm. Just a teensy little bit. Totally didn't almost die. >.>

Josephine had never seen someone more handsome than the specimen standing in front of them.

Stopppp she did not just call him a specimen XDD

“It’s fine, Persephone,” Josephine said, lightly smiling, “I’m a fire-breathing bitch, remember? I think I can handle it myself. I’ll see you later.”

Bahaha xD Also not me briefly confusing Jase with Jason the guard :skull:

She didn’t open up much, and Josephine definitely wasn’t the type to push people.

Ooh yes, I can definitely see this. Persephone has been rather secretive, and Josephine hasn't pushed for answers. Very accurate line to sum up their current relationship!

She spent her whole life begging the universe for a gift. Begging for some type of recognition, approval, and anything of that nature. Today, the Gods granted her that prayer, and she wanted nothing to do with it. When the Big Twelve finds out about her power, they could deem it too powerful, and exile her for it; regardless of who her parents are.

Okay yesssss this is the kind of thinking/reaction I was hoping for in the previous review !! Love getting more context to the implications of her having this power as well. :D

Josephine held the glass on her thigh and studied him, “Let me guess. You’re of Hades.”

Wait that'd be so weird because Persephone would be like his stepmother or smth-

“My point is that I think you’re just like me. I think you’re going to inherit two gifts. If we work together, we’d be unstoppable.”

Oh? A power couple?? :eyes:

Josephine looked at the floor and played with her fingers, “How do I know I can trust you, Jase?”

No don't trust anyone, Josie >:[ You've known him for literally less than five minutes. Don't be fooled by the hotness.

But this wasn’t a decision for her to make. Her loyalty was with Persephone. The most she could do was voice her opinion.

Aww love to see that loyalty <3

“Oh,” Jase growled, “and by the way, I think burnt clothing suits you. Really brings out your eyes.”

:skull: x2 That is such a silly line I can't- Jase, are you colorblind? I doubt charred brown clothing brings out the seafoam green in Josephine's eyes >_> (Though to be fair, I don't know much fashion, so.)

Jase Vitalis was going to be the death of her.

Ohh the irony with his last name meaning life... XD

It's The Tot That Counts - Some Advice
Jase handed her the drink, “I’ve been watching you, and I’m quite impressed.

It'd be great if he could specify what he's impressed by. Like, I get that she's won two trials already, but multiple other people have done that too, I'm sure! Is it because Josephine won without having discovered her gift? If so, I feel like he should say that's the reason he's impressed, instead of later saying it's a problem! Or maybe he's impressed by something else, idk xD

And I just have two spelling/grammar nitpicks here. Let me know what kind of feedback you'd like, actually-- spelling and grammar, larger plot or character things, things that are confusing or don't make sense to me, or everything. ^^

But… we shouldn’t allow the past to effect the future, right, daughter of Ares?

Pretty sure it should be "affect" instead of "effect" here. :]

She was pretty sure he was a mentor, so how could he even be participating in the Trials? Although, if he does wield both gifts like he says he does, he could possibly be their strongest weapon.

Also a small thing, but you briefly shifted into present tense with the second sentence here. It's best to keep the tense consistent, meaning it should be "did" instead of "does"!

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I just started reading A Court of Thorns and Roses, and this definitely reminds me of that with the flowing description, dialogue, and Josephine's badass lines. So congrats, you sound like a published author already! :D

Ngl, my favorite part was reading that Josephine's loyalty was to Persephone. Friends before boys all the way! xD I am looking forward to reading interactions between the three of them, though, especially the sniping at each other that I'm sure will take place between Persephone and Jase... (Spoiler alert: I'm on Team Persephone >.>)

Time Fries When You're Having Fun - Final Words
The one gift she did discover, she didn’t even inherit. Neither Aphrodite nor Ares wielded fire.

Finally, this line in particular is intriguing. I remember Hephaestus was associated with fire? (I mean, Leo at least can wield fire >.>) So is she perhaps the daughter of Aphrodite and Hephaestus?? Or Hades, since a previous chapter mentioned he could wield fire? Or did she get her power in a totally different manner? Hmmm. Excited to read more and eventually find out! :>

Chip, chip, hooray!! Thank you for taking the time to write and post this, and I hope this review is of some use to you!

I'll see you tater! I hope you have a magnificent day (or night) wherever you are!




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I love your comments XD And you're team Persephone, you say? :eyes:



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yay! XD and yesssss :eyes:



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Hello Again, My Friend!

It's me, Raven, and I'm reviewing the next chapter in this great story using my Familiar method today! Let's dive in, shall we? Heh heh heh...

What The Black Eyes See...

This felt like an intriguing yet overall tame chapter, perfect to balance the intensity of the last one. Jase already sounds like he'll be a great addition to the story, and you used another awesome underrepresented goddess to introduce him! I imagine Hecate having some really cool powers. Jase's bitter history with Persephone, and proposal for an alliance between the three of them, was another interesting thing to think about. Let's get into the details though.

Where The Dagger Points...

As far as errors or what I would personally recommend for improvements, not much! You nailed your descriptions, the flow of the chapter, and the dialogue was rich and lively. Really captured the mood. There was, however, one minor typo in the paragraph alluding to Persephone and Jase's rivalry.

"This was this third run before he ran for Olympus Council in the Summer.
Corrections and recommendations."

I think you intended to say it was *his* third run. Very minor error.

Of course, I am not a professional, so please always take my advice with a grain of salt.

Why The Grin Widened...

Okay, first thing that stood out was Josephine's...interesting reaction to Jase's presence, and corresponding internal dialogue. It was funny, the way it was portrayed, but it also felt like an interesting element to her character and the story overall! A love interest always seems to stir things up. This moment especially made me chuckle:

Josephine pursed her lips, sitting up in her seat, “I’m listening, Waterboy.” If he wanted something from her, he needed to work for it. She also wouldn’t mind watching that handsome face beg.


Ah, I would not mind reading more about sassy Josephine! I love it! Haha.

What else stood out was this, here:

...Although, if he does wield both gifts like he says he does, he could possibly be their strongest weapon.

Or greatest enemy. She shuddered internally at the thought.


I feel like this was the perfect way to summarize Jase's introduction. Just like Persephone the first time around, it leaves the reader wondering -just like Josephine- if he will be a great enemy or a great ally, and with such big powers and combat skills, that would be a dramatic tip of the scale either way. Exciting for sure ~

Our Mad Thoughts...

Overall, like I said, it was a slower chapter but rich with mystery and intrigue. You draw the reader in with Persephone's conflict and this mysterious new character, and leave on a note that has us eager to figure out who the heck he really is, and what Josephine will do with his offer. Nicely done! :)

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Ley says...


Ahh! Jase is definitely going to play a rather large role the more chapters pass, hehe. He's also has one of my favorite character backgrounds, which you'll find out later on. I'm glad you liked this chapter! :D




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