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Wow, that's really good, I love it!
Man, you're just firing out these poems lately huh?

I battle with depression as well as it is a hard fight. Depression truly does feel like your being controlled by a dark force. I literally have no suggestions the poem is relatable and powerful. I’m in awe. If you ever need someone to talk to I’m always here <3. I may not know exactly what youre going through because everyone has there own unique type of torture but I struggle with depression too so I may relate.

@DemonGoddess

I really love how you formatted this poem and the words you chose! It's a very beautiful poem; I think it's because of how easily the words flow together when reading them.

If you ever need someone to talk to you, you can always send me a message. <3 Sometimes we go through really dark spots in our lives, but I promise it'll get better soon.

LAKE STOPPIT! Stop writing so well!
XD

I can't write poems for the life of me, so I don't have much criticism. I'll respect your wishes and not like the poem, but I have to say, you completely deserve your place in the literary spotlight. You are very talented. This poem reminded me of a Twenty One Pilots song, it's really good, and one of my favorite lines from it is "The dark's not taking prisoners tonight" I have that quote pinned on my wall and it's in my sketchbook. I relate to this poem on so many levels and I wish I could express myself as well as you do. You showed the inner struggle that goes on inside so many people, and I'm really happy that you turned it around some at the end. We all need to keep fighting against those demons, not listen to their lies, and not let the dark take any prisoners tonight.
Keep writing and keep fighting, friend.

I'm not going to leave a critical review or anything, but I wanted to let you know that you always have someone out there who loves you, wants you to overcome whatever you may be going through with metaphorical demons. I know all too well how these feelings feel and especially how confusing they are. I am now an 18 year old who has suffered from depression and bad circumstances most of my life... what I can tell you from my own experience: It DOES get better.

Slightly more reviewy: I absolutely adore the form with your stanzas going from one side to the next, and the way your rhyme scheme is. You portray your feelings very well. I love your last line, "I'll fight them one more night", because of the way your poem goes, it seems as thiugh this is a repetition of several nights. This shows me that you want to keep fighting.

p.s: I know you asked not to like it, but I love your newest poem, so I hope you don't mind too much.

This is not a review!

I can honestly relate to this because I am in the same position every night too. (metaphorically)

smile! did i make you smile? no? okay... cinnamon rolls, adorable fanfics, dank memes about our favorite bands, friends you can share with

are you smiling?

keep fighting for all of us!

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Don't like this please...I don't want to take up half of Literary Spotlight. It feels wrong.