ZeldaIsShiek here back for another review on realistic poetry! I have not been doing a lot of these lately, so let's dive right into it!
First off, I like how you titled the poem. Being fond of poetry myself, I really like it when a poet will name their poem something that has little to do with the main poem itself. This guarantees a swift opening and an astonishing start to the poem! I liked this comparison to the cigarettes and the tootsie pop commercial later in the poem, too. It really helped me grasp the effect of the title and how you paced the poem.
Next, I'd like to talk about the poem in general. I like how you compare cigarettes to the thought of 'you' in lines 4-6. I also really liked how you ended the poem! Reading it again, I realized that the pacing was not just creative license, it was a device to alter the feeling of the poem! It's like Rogue One: Once you read/see it once, the confusion from the beginning goes away since you understand what it's about!
Thank you for the freat work, and keep writing! -ZeldaIsShiek
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