Hi, here for a quick review. Couple quick thoughts.
1. So this isn't from Violet's viewpoint, but you seem to make the connection that she and you are similar in your thought, process. But I personally don't get the connection on where Violet has had this outlook on love. I mean sure, she got stood up cuz the kid got his memory wiped, but she more hates on the idea of being a superhero it seemed to me.
2. The way you have the lines centered (can't remember the correct term) is alright, but with the disparity between long and short lines, it can be hard to read it with a flow when your eyes go from right to left to middle to left to right yknow? IT's up to you if you want to change it, but I think aligning it to the left would do no harm.
3. It's well-written. Their's definitely a lot of passion in this piece. It feels very heartfelt and raw. Nothing held back. I like that a lot. Poetry can have a knack for just diving straight to core feelings and emotions in ways that other forms of writing, essays and novels for instance, have to take longer and be more nuanced about.
4. You have an interesting take on love, I'm not going to lie. I think of lot of this comes from the "love" that movies and songs push about this touchy-feely happy infatuation instead of true sacrificial love, and so in some ways I understand the frustration in this poem,, although, I found it in some ways sad that Violet, or you I guess, in the end seem to succumb to the idea that eventually you'll love. At the same time I'm in a relationship so I can't necessarily agree personlly with everything in this poem xD
Overall it's a well-written piece that feels genuine and polished. Keep writing.
~Messy
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