The Antiquark buckled every so slightly as another asteroid slammed into the side. The pilot of the ship, Vankous Frostification, proceeded to give it the stink eye as it continued to fly past.
"They're never going to clean up the Voltra Belt are they?"
"No they are not," said Kaitlyn Hardy, walking up to him at the cockpit. "But then, if they did they'd also probably bother to update the speed limit."
Vankous cackled, a genuine full bodied villain cackle. "Princess Kaitlyn, ever so kind and ready to remind everyone except when outdated speed limits suit her needs."
"Hey! These idiots just absolutely do not understand the definition of emergency. Which they better, I mean they have eighteen words for it in their language."
"They just don't like you."
"Well... yes. It does more harm than good okay? You know Jason would've informed them if he genuinely though the lack of an update would cause widespread chaos."
Vankous rolled his eyes. "Yes genius. I was teasing you."
Kate snickered. "And look at you fail." Vankous groaned. "Its only you. Every time. Every. Single. Time."
Kate did a little twirl and bowed. "What can I say? Its a gift."
She walked back into the cabin where the rest of the team were sitting in anticipation. Chudnofsky Maliachiskinsky was busy admiring his axe, possibly trying to check for sharpness or just generally enamored with it, it was hard to tell sometimes. James Bonlark was staring off into space, his suit and tie somehow impeccable as always. Behind them Raymond Sanders was looking at the quick memo Kate had typed up for the mission while next to him Tapusha Romero was peering over, green hair falling a little into her eyes.
"Everyone ready for today's mission?"
Chud promptly snorted. "I wouldn't call this a mission."
Kate huffed. "It is a perfectly valid thing to be doing thank you very much."
"Really? James?"
He looked up with a shrug. "I mean. Its a noble goal I suppose. Letting two people meet, the old meet cute."
"I can't believe this." Chud flipped around, his long red hair flying wild. "You two can't also agree surely."
Ray, composed as always, straightened his own suit and tie. "Its an important temporal event. It may be less exciting than breaking into a fully armed fortress but the little details matter sometimes."
Tapusha looked up from the memo as well. Her green eyes looked especially bright with excitement. "This is an important meeting you know. Several crews from several known temporal terrorist organizations will be here. This couple will singlehandedly bring about several of their ends. Trust me. Earth's anti piracy unit is about to get one heck of an upgrade."
"Wait what? That was not included in the memo."
"Background research is always a good idea." Ray patted Chud on the shoulder. "Don't worry I'm sure Vankous didn't even read thee memo."
"I did not," came the proud declaration from up front.
Kate giggled. "Predictable as always. So is that all then Chud?"
He nodded. "I suppose that's something valuable enough."
"Good. Hey at least you were still on board even though you didn't think it was worth it."
He scoffed. "Well yes. I'm not going to say no. We're always in this together." Kate's smile softened.
"Thank you everyone once again for agreeing to fill in for the usual. I know doing tasks for my whole goddess of love thing isn't your style, but I really needed the help today. Everyone needs their vacation and this is just a little too much for me to handle alone."
Ray waved it off. "Its quite literally a vacation for us to tackle something simpler like this so think nothing of it." Kate nodded and turned back to Vankous.
"We there yet?"
"About a lightyear to go, so pretty much. I think you guys should get ready to land."
Kate nodded. "Alright boys and girl. Do you remember the game plan?"
"No because I didn't listen.."
Kate rolled her eyes. "Yes Vankous we know that. That's why I'm asking them specifically."
Ray of course nodded, patting down his coat pocket. "All ready to infiltrate the airport's security system. It should be a cakewalk. 2060's Earth encryption is...how you say...baby food."
Kate giggled. "That it was. James?"
"I'll be on the field, dress up as the janitor, put up the wet floor sign, make the floor wet. I think I got it."
"Good. You two?"
"Making sure no one dies."
"Very important job of course."
"Do we capture everyone that comes in to attack or do we just try to scare them off?"
"There' s no point capturing them in this century, go for the scare, if it does work just to see security, then you are authorized to use force, non lethal of course."
"Of course. We'll be careful."
"Any restrictions on weapons?"
"Surprisingly no. Since we're spreading a moment that is inherently considered mythical or magical by law we are permitted to use whatever the heck we want and the mortals will simply note it down as part of the legend."
Chud chuckled. "The lengths they go to hide true magic never ceases to amaze me, but I suppose I can't complain. There's something about a beautiful story that really does inspire civilizations."
"Now you're getting it. That's why we do this work. To create those beautiful legends, those stories that inspire generations. A good love story is far more powerful than a reciprocating orbital cannon." Kate's eyes glowed a faint blue, like they always did when she got a little excited.
"So what are you going to do?"
"I'll be making sure there's some magic in the air."
Vankous' frown was almost audible. "That's not made up? You actually do that?"
"Duh? You can't get a magical shimmer in the air and that little feeling in your heart from absolutely nothing. I mean yes you do, Like obviously the attraction and the love force itself does a lot, but this enhances it into a moment that's truly impossible to forgot and for the history books."
Ray nodded. "The true meet cute."
"Nothing quite like it." Kate smile and for just a second a swirl of pink energy swept over the ship.
I really enjoyed this! I loved the idea of an alien ship controlling romance on earth, and all the banter between the characters was cute. You did a very nice job establishing each character and making them unique and interesting. Overall a great concept and execution, would love to see more.
Also, just generally hope you are doing well!
Salutations, Kate!
As offered and requested, here's your review! ^_^
I checked the other reviews beforehand to see what's already been mentioned. I see some low-level feedback (punctuation, typos, etc.) that has yet to be applied, so I'm going to skip most of that, but I will give you some advice on using hyphens.
Oh, and fair warning, I'm also going to focus on critiques far more than praise. Don't cry, since I'm not saying you suck. XD
The Antiquark buckled every so slightly as another asteroid slammed into the side. The pilot of the ship, Vankous Frostification, proceeded to give it the stink eye as it continued to fly past.
Kate wrote:The Antiquark buckled every so slightly as another asteroid slammed into the side. The pilot of the ship, Vankous Frostification, proceeded to give it the stink eye as it continued to fly past.
"They're never going to clean up the Voltra Belt are they?"
"No they are not," said Kaitlyn Hardy, walking up to him at the cockpit. "But then, if they did they'd also probably bother to update the speed limit."
Vankous cackled, a genuine full bodied villain cackle. "Princess Kaitlyn, ever so kind and ready to remind everyone except when outdated speed limits suit her needs."
"Hey! These idiots just absolutely do not understand the definition of emergency. Which they better, I mean they have eighteen words for it in their language."
"They just don't like you."
Hunter wrote:The Antiquark quivered slightly as an asteroid plinked into its side. The starship's pilot cast a stink-eye in the long-past asteroid's general direction.
"Stupid thing," he muttered. "Is it too much to ask to clean up the Voltra Belt?"
"It's an asteroid belt, Frosty," a young woman said, entering the cockpit. "It is, in fact, too much to ask."
He groaned. "Princess Kaitlyn! Please, stop answering my rhetorical questions! And stop calling me that!"
The princess, dressed in an un-royal [brief outfit description here], grinned mischievously. "You missed the second 'please'. And no, not until you start calling me 'Kate', Mr Please-Call-Me-Vankous-Frostification."
Frosty sighed. "I tried."
"Maybe the ninth time will work!" she said, giggling. "Just like you'll keep telling me no, we absolutely can't go any faster."
"I must tolerate dirty space rocks, so you must tolerate interplanetary speed limits, Princess."
She made an exasperated noise and gestured at the window. "They can't stop or even monitor us any more than they can de-asteroid an asteroid belt! And they have eighteen different words for the concept of 'emergency' in their language! How is this anything but ridiculous?"
"Your duty is to create laws, Princess," Frosty said. "My duty is simply to follow and complain about them."
"Yet you can't accept an impromptu amendment that permits you to bypass nonsensical space traffic regulations."
"Perhaps the forty-seventh time will succeed," the pilot says sweetly.
Kate huffs. "If you're going to quote me back at me, you're supposed to keep the words the same."
"I sincerely apologise for my stylistic adjustment."
Kate wrote:She walked back into the cabin where the rest of the team were sitting in anticipation. Chudnofsky Maliachiskinsky was busy admiring his axe, possibly trying to check for sharpness or just generally enamored with it, it was hard to tell sometimes. James Bonlark was staring off into space, his suit and tie somehow impeccable as always. Behind them Raymond Sanders was looking at the quick memo Kate had typed up for the mission while next to him Tapusha Romero was peering over, green hair falling a little into her eyes.
"Everyone ready for today's mission?"
Chud promptly snorted. "I wouldn't call this a mission."
Hunter wrote:She returned to the cabin and quietly stopped to evaluate her crew. James stared out a window, his suit as impeccable and his expression as unreadable as always. Ray squinted at the memo Kate had typed for the mission while Tapusha peered over his shoulder. When she swept a green lock of hair back behind an ear, she looked up and winked at Kate — probably because she'd lost her memo. And Chud sat away from the rest, slowly, lovingly running a whetstone over his axe's head.
Kate cleared her throat. "Everyone ready for today's mission?"
Chud snorted, his characteristically gruff expression replacing the currently reverent one. He looked up and wrinkled his nose a little. "I wouldn't exactly call it that."
Hello, Kate! Wist here for a review. You already know I'm deeply invested in these characters, so I'm here to see where this journey takes them!
This short story is quite cute and is leading up to a sweet, heartfelt series of soft moments. It's a careful balance writing stories like this because it can easily slip into self-indulgence. However, so far, you've walked the balance well, where it's currently evident that there will still be conflict and narrative tension. That said, let's get into the story's details.
The Antiquark buckled every so slightly as another asteroid slammed into the side. The pilot of the ship, Vankous Frostification, proceeded to give it the stink eye as it continued to fly past.
"These idiots just absolutely do not understand the definition of emergency. Which they better, I mean they have eighteen words for it in their language."
...if he genuinely though the lack of an update...
Kate snickered. "And look at you fail." Vankous groaned. "Its only you. Every time. Every. Single. Time."
Chudnofsky Maliachiskinsky was busy admiring his axe, possibly trying to check for sharpness or just generally enamored with it, it was hard to tell sometimes. James Bonlark was staring off into space, his suit and tie somehow impeccable as always. Behind them Raymond Sanders was looking at the quick memo Kate had typed up for the mission while next to him Tapusha Romero was peering over, green hair falling a little into her eyes.
"...the old meet cute."
"...Vankous didn't even read thee memo."
"About a lightyear to go, so pretty much."
"Making sure no one dies."
"Do we capture everyone that comes in to attack or do we just try to scare them off?"
"...go for the scare, if it does work just to see security, then you are authorized to use force, non lethal of course."
"Nothing quite like it." Kate smile and a swirl of pink energy swept over the ship for just a second. "
An excellent story, the continuation of which I would really like to hear 
. I like the touch of science fiction that can be felt from the story and I have to admit that in a relatively short work you managed to outline the characters' personalities very well. I like your writing style. It's fluent, it doesn't get stuck on little things, it flows nicely and the dialogues seem quite natural to me. I also like the dynamics between the characters and the ending, which leaves the reader with at least a hint of anticipation for a sequel (if there will be one or already exists). I really enjoyed reading it! The cover is also quite nice.
This is absolutely heartwarming. The characters are personable, the dialogue was easy to follow, and the theme is pure comfort.
I did spy some forgotten quotation marks, so please keep this in mind for your later works! Other than that, amazing writing, magnificent character interaction, and beautiful theme!
Keep going! 
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