Young Writers Society

This is a very cool concept that I would've never thought of! The text, if revised, could make a story very interesting. The villager getting hurt and dying could be a very interesting plot point. The villagers communicating could be them about to execute the villager that dies later on in the poem. The beacon could be a device used to dispose of the villagers body afterwards. Anyways didn't mean to write a story that I might use just with some changes, but nice poem either way.

Hello!! Just stopping in for a quick review. I think the concept of this is super cool. I love thinking about how poetry is everywhere: even in places you don’t expect like Minecraft. Honestly if you really want to get aggressively deep, you could find so much meaning in any one these everyday subtitles. As for the poem itself, I really liked what you did there creating a narrative with these little phrasing and making it feel like I’m witnessing the cycle of someone’s life through the eyes of almost like an omniscient being. The experienced gained subtitle added a really nice touch, and I liked the repetition at the end with egg flies to show how the cycle continues and never ends. You could easily read this poem in a loop forever in this sense. I thought it was interesting how experience was mostly gained through pain as well. It really says something about the human experience. Anyway, sorry to overanalyze your poem, but I really liked this concept. I hope to see more from you in the future!

-Avery <3
P.S. Sorry in advance if there’s any weird percent signs and stuff in my review. I’m on my phone and website glitches weird with that lol.