oooooh the good emotions are continued here
Andrew here with a review! I know it's been a while, but umm, gottt really busy, and started The Brother Karamazov, which for the record is amazing but also 700 pages long so that's been taking up a lot of my reading time.
But I'm back, overall, I liked this section a lot, contuied the good real emotions vibes, seems like real humans. Into specifics
As usual they had to maintain silence as they made their way along the dimly lit hallways heading for the "Mess Hall" as it was called. It was one of the rooms that Daisy actually liked for one single reason. Unlike 90% of the rooms that could be found inside camp, this room actually had proper lighting which meant she could see the entire room. Of course, their "hospitality" only extended that far. The actual food provided was...questionable at best. The smell was barely tolerable and there was no real taste to it. According to what she'd heard, that was definitely not what food was supposed to be like, although never having had anything besides that, there was no way to know if that was true. Maybe all food had always been that way, and everyone liked to think it used to be better.
This is a really interesting idea, but I feel this paragraph is disorganized like the authors said something, realized that didn't make sense, so they backtracked on it.
The idea of being able to tell that things must be better than they are, even if you've never experienced better, is really well explored in 1984, where the main character and narrator talks about how he never really experienced good coffee or comfortable clothes, he knows that what he's drinking is bad coffee and what he is wearing is uncoromftorble. If I remember correctly he believes this is the outcry of the human soul, which knows there has to be better. This theme of radical hope, that reality is better than what we have is extremely interesting, and one of the main factors or religion. In my opinion radical hope is one of the most likable human traits, so I really like what you're doing here to show that our characters, though they have never experienced it better, know it must exist, and know they might be able to get it if they can be free. I would like to see this explored more, and this particular paragraph edited and expanded.
But that's just my two cents!
Also, the fliiirty is getting reaaaall intense.
Thanks, and keep writing,
-Andrew
Points: 34
Reviews: 178
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