Hey Harry!
RandomTalks here with a review!
We are still taking a brake then. This chapter was actually relatively slower and calmer than your previous chapters. It is not bad as it allows us to get a deeper feel of the story, it is just a little different as I am used to cliffhangers and surprise meetings from you.
I liked how you described their work in detail. It must have some significance for you to go into such elaboration. Still it flowed naturally and did not feel tedious at all. Learning about their work gives us a deeper understanding about their lives which I think is really important, especially because this is set in a dystopian world where we don't have much to rely on except our imagination. I was a little curios about Daisy not minding the heat as she was the one who made that comment about the place melting them to the bones. And of course the ending, where we realize how closely the aliens monitor these people. I do not think they supplied those tools because of the human's discomfort though. I think they just want the work done and are willing to speed up the process by providing them with some actual stuff. I was a little curios about how they supplied those tools in the middle of the night though. Makes me wonder if any of the humans have actually ever seen the aliens.
I found this part a little 'still'. Mostly because there wasn't much dialogue and Aria was not included. Harry and Aria's bantering bring in the humor and lightness in this story and honestly, I always look forward to those. Overall, this was a nice continuation.
Here's a nitpick for you:
Daisy nodded and began to push the vehicle in front of here.
I think you meant 'her' instead of 'here'.
She returned a few minutes later, looking like she'd just come back form a shower of run a marathon, or potentially both.
Some small typos here. I think it will be "just come back from a shower or ran a marathon".
That's all!
Keep writing and have a great day!
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