Ooooooh forest, trees. Andrew here with a review. This chapter was a good extension of the last one, if a bit anticlimatic (all they got to see was trees? ): ) I can understand Arias utter shock, it would be like seeing the afterlife. I can only imagine that people have thought about outside the wall for some time.
Real quick thought, and correct me if I'm wrong, but the humans have been trapped for generations now right? How much access to history and knowledge to they have, because if what they have is limited, I can imagine the word of math would morphe into mythological stories. Turning the time before into an almost Eden-type faerie tale. Facts would turn into metaphors and history into legends. Generals and soldiers into heroes and demigods. I think this could be a really interesting idea to play with, even if they have good records, the information does not spread perfectly, we already have almost 'myths' about the past centries. (IE, conspiracy theories, tall tales, stories from wars, things blown out of proportion, newer religions etc.)
But into specifics!
Knowing what was outside the wall wasn't something she'd imagined they'd ever be able to see.
Weirdly built sentence
As she looked up again to see what more of the forest could be seen by the drone
Honestly I was expecting some game-changing piece of info, but a forest works too. But I would like more of a description here, tall trees, short trees? Deciduous or evergreen? Other plants? Any signs of animals? Thick forest floor? What season? I presume they can see some of that.
Venocarpathians
oooooh, alein names.
“Sadly no,” said Mr. Summers, “this has all been possible through some very clever engineering by our resident mad scientist here.” He pointed at Mr. Summers.
Got to love Mr. Summers talking in the third person and pointing at himself.
“Yes, I think time to wrap up for today. These two need their sleep as well. Besides this meeting was mostly about just introducing you two to what’s really out there,” said Mrs. Kane, “the specifics we can talk of later.”
So this big meeting just to show them a video of the woods! They put all the effort into making the meeting happen just for that? I want to know more!
Sorry for my outburst, I'm just brimming with questions, XD.
There were more grammatical mistakes than normal in this chapter, so I'd suggest skimming for those, but nothing major.
But that's all just my two cents! Hope it helps
Thanks, and keep writing,
Andrew
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