Hey Harry!
RandomTalks here with a short review!
This was a solid continuation of the story in the sense that it moves the plot along as usual, bringing them one step closer to their escape and at the same time bringing us one step closer to the end. However, at this juncture it feels like that has become the only purpose of the story right now - to move the plot along to its eventual end. We have actually come to a point where the excitement is mostly over, so I am not asking you to bring in those elements of the story. However, even in the first few chapters of the story, when things were a little slow and there were no big revelations at the end of every chapter, there was still that individualistic tone to every chapter. I wont say that its completely missing now, but the way you are progressing with the narration, you are not making us very invested in the story. You are telling us what is going on, but you are not making us feel all that much. Its been the same for the last few parts, its lacking a little freshness? Does that even make sense?
I felt that the second part had a more personal touch. We get to hear Aria's concerns and worries and even yhough they don't hold us like they used to, it still brings in that characteristic element to the story. Maybe if you play around with her thoughts a bit, include her observations of the other characters or even her feelings regarding the mission, it could introduce new dynamics to the story which would be quite welcome at this point. Maybe mention her exhaustion or her relief at overcoming the most difficult parts of the mission?
I feel like I have been offering the same criticisms for a while now, so I apologize if I sound a bit repetitive. Well, now we are steadily moving towards the end. I think we still have two chapters left, so I am pretty excited to see what you have in mind for that!
Keep writing and have a great day!
Until next time!
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