Hey Harry!
RandomTalks here with a short review!
This was a more laid-back and relaxed part, and honestly, I am not going to complain. It seems that the cliffhanger from the previous part wasn't that big of a deal and 'the thud' was just Ryan landing in safety. I thought it would be anticlimactic after the great excitement you caused with that ending, but I am more than glad that they did not have to fight through any big battles right now. They are very close to the ending, and I would really like for them to go i peace (of course, you are not going to do that).
I did think that the transformation of the tone and pace from the previous part to this one happened a little too quickly and it felt like we glossed over certain details. In that sense, it was more like the first part of this chapter. It felt like a monotonous narration of what was going on and I had forgotten that we were supposed to read from Daisy's point of view. It changed again once they were on move and trying to hide behind the trees. At that time, I could again hear Daisy's voice, her thoughts and feelings, as once again get caught up in what is happening in the moment.
I enjoyed the calm of this part. You moved the plot along in an easy and effortless manner and this chapter was like a fresh breath of air after the dangers and uncertainties of the forest. Even now, we don't have much idea of what is going to happen. But they are almost out now, and whatever happens, this is it.
She turned to give Harry a quick smile and then she was off, the looked towards the side that the transports were supposed to come from as she ran.
There was a bit of a difficult interruption with "the looked towards the side". Not sure if it was a typo or there are words missing.
That's all!
Keep writing and have a great day!
Until next time!
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