Hi Harry,
Mailice here with a short review!
Back to Daisy and we actually start the chapter where we left off the other day. There's something exciting about the way you seamlessly pick up from the last chapter and help your first full paragraph to give a brief description of what's to come.
That's kind of what happened in this part, too; it's more of an overview than a big progression of the plot. By leaving out the dialogue and giving more of a "documentary" about a new possible plan, you sort of create a new "layer" of storytelling here.
I think it's a bit weird for the beginning of the chapter, and yet I kind of like the way you've done it here. In terms of pace, I think the chapter so far has lost some of that compared to the previous one - which is not a bad way to put it. Especially in combination with the next part, I like this structure, which a lot is in a minimalist style.
Other points I noticed while reading:
They ran through the fields of grass, tearing through as fast as their tired legs could manage to carry them.
Your beginning here has actually a pretty neat sound to it; almost poetic with the repetition of the two parts of the sentence.
The town was luckily pretty close to the forest and as far as the drone was able to see, it didn’t look like there were going to be any guards at the town itself, or at least there hadn’t been many and the reports had suggested that the few that were in the town had probably been the ones that reported to the gates on the second fence.
The sentence is actually very long. On one hand I can see, that somebody that runs a lot right now doesn't have enough energy to formulate different kind of sentences, but since it don´t look like it is part of a thought, I would split it a bit.
Have fun writing!
Mailice
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