Hey Harry!
Randomtalks here with a short review!
Its three in the morning, and I am very tired, so excuse any typos you might find while going through this review!
That said, I really enjoyed reading this chapter. I know it isn't really over yet, and you have for sure, planned some massive cliffhanger for the actual end, but this did feel like an end to the 'plant scene', and I have to say I liked how you have executed this entire thing. It did give me some Harry Potter vibes, but there was this rush of excitement and danger presented in this particular escape that we hadn't really gotten until now. It was interesting to read wait and find out how they got out of this one. The acid idea was brilliant and it does solve a lot of problems for them, especially the problem of the guards who still might have been after them.
I did feel like the end of this scene came a little too abruptly. Its like we are completely immersed in what is going on and then suddenly its over. And while I really liked the conclusion you chose for this scene, I thought it happened too quickly. Especially the transition from barely escaping with their lives and making light jokes about breaking down trees seemed a little too haphazard to me and I think it would have been better if you had probably included this conclusion in the previous part and started with the 'fence' here.
Speaking of, the 'fence' does come on a little abruptly as well. I am sure we had not heard of it earlier, but then again, we really didn't knw anything about the forest from beforehand. They seem to have all the information from this 'mysterious document' everyone keeps mentioning, but I kind of like the fact that we are blind in here. Makes it more exciting when something goes wrong eventually and we don't see it coming beforehand.
One tiny nitpick:
he yelled not care who or what would hear him.
Just a slight typo - 'care' will be 'caring' here.
I am quite interested to see how they make this 'climbing platform'.
That's all!
Keep writing and have a great day!
Until next time!
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