Hey! Forever here with a review!
This was an interesting part. Okay, now the animal does appear to be more dangerous thn I thought it to be. And I ardently hope Daisy's assumption is right that it is one of the most powerful animals in the forest because if anything more powerful comes in front of them– it will be hard to tackle for the trio.
I would like to know how the animal actually smelled. Like it's not an earthly animal, so it's very very difficult to know how it smelled. Also, I would really like to know a bit about the sight that was skillfully escaped in the beginning. I do feel that there's something wrong with the flow of the beginning of this part. It doesn't seem like the continuation of the previous part but rather the beginning of a new chapter which happens after quite some time. However, in reality it's supposed to be the continuation. So, you might actually take a look at that.
“Kate, Daisy, get ready to run on my count,” ordered Aria suddenly from behind.
I don't see why Aria really ordered only them because there were other two and I don't think she wasted hee time gesturing to them and then telling to the others. Also, I don't see why Aria was really with Harry and Ryan. I mean as a leadee, it isn't uncommon or unnatural but if we take into account the fact that she can't really shoot, I would have preferred giving Kate the position. Or was it for the fact that she wanted to keep Daisy safe besides giving Kate some rest?
Okay, now I am honestly expecting something horrible to happen, I don't know why I am expecting but ah... I am. Like when the something ends with a peaceful note, we can expect something to happen that will erase that note in a moment. Why am I srsly imagining that animal pouncing on them? I don't know but I hope that is not going to happen and the peace was rule continue to remain in the next part.
Keep Writing!!
~Forever
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