Hey! Forever here with a review!!
Okay, so we have ourselves a fight situation again. Now in this case, they are probably in a better situation than they were when they had to fight with their colonizers. This situation doesn't really seem to be that dangerous. I don't really know, it's written that they were fighting with death but strangely, I didn't quite get the feeling of death. Maybe it's just me. Or maybe we will be seeing the situation more clearly afterwards when the creature will be on the verge of attacking them. I mean the creature wasn't really attacking them, I guess. Ah, I have the strange imagination that the creature is an innocent creature who is not even in the intention of attacking them but they are very much afraid of it. After all, the creature hasn't really seen many humans in its lifetime and was probably curious to see what had entered its forest. Well, my thoughts sometimes become very strange.
Another thing which I noticed is so many 'said's. Sometimes, I guess it's a bit better to use alternatives to indicate the situation. Like said, in general means to say something normally and I believe that they were not peacefully talking among themselves. They were of course in a great hurry.
The mutant venus fly trap was an interesting thing. However, the good thing is that that can't actually be a dangerous thing unless and until they get towards it. So, not the most dangerous. I hope that they will be able to find a safe spot in the forest and that actually appears to be quite a difficult thing to find because the aliens were quite cautious to actually make the forest into a death trap. Ah, I agreed with Kate on making it go into the Venus Fly Trap. That would be super great to see. Like their own traps would trouble them. However, doesn't seem like that is not going to happen. Pretty sad...
Well, I just hope that no more creatures of the forest will make an appearance. If that happens, it will be a bit too difficult for them to handle the situation. One animal and five humans- the are not in a bad position but if suddenly, the animal gets afraid or angry or something and starts shouting and its friends come to help it, well I don't know what is going to happen. The description of the creature was wonderful.
Keep Writing!!
~Forever
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