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The trio made their way out through the dilapidated doorway and towards the main hallway that would take them to the central hub of the camp. They walked in silence as they made their way across the imposing structure. Talking was forbidden in the halls.
First, I love how you used the word dilapidated. Maybe it's just my neurodivergent self, but that word is so fun. Getting back on topic of the story, though, I again love how it already provokes questions! Why is talking forbidden? You can also infer that the place they're in is very strict. It seems pretty dystopian as well which I like!
These walls were a dull metallic grey, the same color as the steel reinforced concrete they were made of. The hallway was lit by two long strips of old school LED’s, relics of a time long past. They barely had enough light to navigate without bumping into anything.
Again, love the descriptions! Descriptions are definitely one of your skills!
The aliens didn't care at all about keeping everyone's living areas in good condition but they certainly wanted everything else to be in top shape
AH, I loved this part. I had no idea there was going to be aliens, and I also like how this sentence shows their morals. They're obviously pretty selfish in this.
She didn’t appear to be worried on the surface but by the way her forehead creased he could tell that she was not thrilled about being reassigned.
I love how he notices the little details about her!
Oh, thank the fates. It's a door. We escape the bathroom once again.
I also like this sentence! It leaves me with the question of wondering why they want to escape the bathroom. What's so wrong with it?
The two of them set off after Aria and entered the hallway. It was the one that led to the outer walls of the camp. This passageway was flanked by doors leading to various guard stations and armories or at least that’s what the the signs nailed to the doors proclaimed. No human was allowed to enter any of those rooms. Inevitably with a rule like that, many had tried to enter, but so far, no one who'd entered had ever made it out. Harry was always uneasy having to walk past them.
They hurried along the hallway, Harry and Daisy jogging to keep up as Aria barreled down the hallways. It took nearly fifteen minutes of walking before they finally arrived at a set of doors each marked with a letter. Aria didn’t hesitate as she pushed her way through the door marked with a letter ‘H’. Harry took a double take at the letter. As far as he could remember, just last week, there had only been letters up to 'G' which meant the new door had in fact been completed and his guess from earlier was correct.
Aria didn’t slow down as they turned into the passageway to the wall. This one, like the rest of the passages that lead to the doors, was made of glass instead of the usual metal and concrete. Another two minutes in that passage and they finally came to a sliding glass door. Here, Aria stopped and turned to the two of them, her face a mixture of happiness and concern.
This part again further proves your talent with descriptions. I also like the information we get from this. I can't wait to see what happens with the aliens, and thanks for the great chapter!
Points: 52
Reviews: 6
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