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Magic Chapter 1

by Kaia, SkyVibes


The book you are currently viewing has been written in part by KaiaJersaga and in part by MercedesBlue. The characters featured are a blend of KaiaJersaga's I Knew characters and MercedesBlue's Fire Keeper characters.

Dedicated to Mercedes' Hunter and Kaia's Zybryn

After all we put you guys through in the books you came from, we decided to show a little sympathy on you and preserve you from this one. We know you feel a little left out, but trust us, you won't miss the drama. ;)

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“Oh, come on! Not this song again!” Kassie exclaimed, reaching for the dial on the radio and snapping it off. Her annoyed brown eyes moved back to her phone. “At least we aren’t far from the cabin,” she mused, lifting her eyes and moving them toward her cousin.

Jed’s gaze moved momentarily from the road. A faint smile touched his lips as he halted the pickup at the end of the gravel lane they had been traveling on and flicked on the left blinker. “You’re so impatient,” he muttered, casting his cousin a teasing glance. “We’re literally like five minutes away…or less,” he added, turning the pickup onto another gravel road.

Kassie rolled her eyes and aimlessly traced a strand of her blond hair from the side of her cheek down to her waist as she glanced down at her phone. “Yeah,” she replied distantly.

Jed shot her a glance and slid a hand off the steering wheel, aimlessly pulling a strand of his hair that had come loose from his ponytail behind his ear.

An opening in the forest appeared ahead, and a gravel drive became visible. Jed slowed the speed of the pickup and made the turn into the driveway.

Kassie’s eyes lifted from the blond ends of her hair she had been twisting. A faint smile touched her lips as she gazed in awe up at the two-story high cabin before her eyes. Letting her hair twirl out of the twist she had put it in, Kassie turned to face Jed. “I just can’t believe we get this whole place to ourselves until the family reunion. Dad’s crazy to have reserved it so early.”

Jed smiled faintly as he stopped the vehicle at the side of the cabin. “Yeah,” he replied shortly, pulling the keys out of the ignition. “But I don’t mind.” His eyes moved to the passenger seat, but Kassie had already slipped out of it and was pulling open the door to the backseat.

A golden retriever bounded out, dragging a leash behind it. It lunged toward Kassie and eagerly jumped on its hind legs to greet her.

“Hi, Lexi,” Kassie greeted as she bent down to scratch the dog behind her ears. Lexi dropped onto her front paws again as Kassie reached into the backseat and pulled out a bag of snacks she had just purchased.

Jed exited the vehicle and locked it behind himself. Lexi eagerly moved from Kassie toward Jed, dragging her leash dangerously behind her. Jed stepped back, lifting his eyes to Kassie.

She laughed, recognizing the disgust in her cousin’s hazel eyes. She called the dog to herself and started toward the porch. Jed followed behind her. Stepping to the side of the porch, he set the key he had been given to the lock and opened the door, allowing Kassie and her dog to enter first.

A refreshing coolness swept out into the summer heat as Jed pulled his keys from the door and entered the living room after Kassie.

His gaze moved to a comfortable sofa standing in front of a dark TV screen. The remote lay on a small wooden table beside the sofa. A coat hanger stood to the right of the door upon which Kassie had flopped Lexi’s leash.

The girl cast Jed a glance and started for the kitchen, humming a Christmas tune as enthusiastically as if snow were floating down from the summer sky. Her dog followed her. Jed exited the living room and started for the hall leading to the other rooms in the cabin. A thunderous bang suddenly exploded the silence. The windows rattled, followed by a chilling silence.

“What was that?” Kassie shrieked as she ran into the hallway and grabbed Jed’s arm for protection as her nervous eyes moved about the cabin.

Jed shrugged in more of an attempt to relax his shoulders than to respond to Kassie. He stepped past his cousin to where Lexi stood, paws to the door, barking loudly. Casting Kassie a glance, Jed pulled open the door and stepped onto the porch, Lexi eagerly pressing past him to bark at the forest from where the sound appeared to have come from. Jed’s gaze moved to the edge of the forest, and he stared out at it in silent contemplation.

Kassie followed him outside, her worried eyes scanning the forest at the side of the cabin. “What was it?” Kassie whispered hoarsely, wrapping her pale fingers around Jed’s arm. “A bomb?” she asked, lifting her worried eyes to Jed’s face to search for comfort.

Jed shook his head distantly. “Maybe a hunter.” His eyes dropped to his cousin’s worried eyes gazing up at him. Gently, he laid a hand on her arm. “Nothing to worry about, okay?”

Lexi barked again and took a step closer to the grass separating her from the forest.

Kassie stepped forward and grabbed her dog’s collar to hold her back. Her worried eyes lifted to Jed’s face. “What would a hunter be doing down here?”

Jed shrugged. “Probably nothing to worry about.”

Lexi barked again and jolted forward.

“Whoa, girl,” Kassie shouted, trying to force the dog to take a step back. “Don’t go anywhere, Lexi. It’s probably not safe out there for a dog like you to be running around wild.”

Lexi’s barking grew more desperate. Kassie cast Jed a glance. The dog suddenly bolted forward, tearing itself free of Kassie’s restraining hold. “Lexi!” Kassie shrieked after her dog as the moving blur reached the edge of the woods.

Jed turned swiftly just as Kassie took off after her dog, screaming its name.

“Kassie!” Jed called after her, breaking into a run to catch up with his cousin. He reached the forest and plunged into it, following the row of bent grass blades in the direction he supposed Kassie had gone.

Ahead, she came into view, running wildly toward the blurry image of her dog running crazily through the forest. Kassie slowed her footsteps and dropped to the ground, exhausted.

Jed stopped beside her, casting the vicinity a glance.

Kassie lifted her eyes to her cousin’s face. She frowned and quickly stood up, staring questioningly into the sky. “Jed…” she breathed, her lips parting in surprise.

“What?” Jed asked, continuing to glance around in search of the dog. “Where’d she go?”

“What is…” Kassie’s voice trailed off as she stared up at the sky questioningly. She suddenly turned back to Jed. “Look! Look!” she exclaimed, pointing excitedly to the sky and eagerly grabbing Jed’s arm.

Jed frowned and glanced skeptically up at the sky from between the tree branches. “What?” he asked in an irritated tone. His eyes moved back to Kassie as he tried to pry her fingers from his arm. “We need to find your dog before she—"

“There it is again!” Kassie exclaimed, cutting off her cousin’s words and pointing wildly above her. Her excited brown eyes moved to Jed’s face as she tugged at his arm, still pointing to the sky. “I bet that’s what Lexi’s going crazy about.”

“Look, we don’t have time for this. We need to find your dog,” Jed ordered, tearing his arm free of Kassie’s fervent grasp.

Kassie frowned and lowered her arm, her big brown eyes slowly lowering from the sky. “Aw, man, it’s gone. I can’t see it anymore.”

She turned her eager eyes back to Jed and opened her arms in front of her. “It was the biggest bird I have ever seen,” she declared in perfect seriousness as her excited eyes traced her cousin’s disbelieving face and characteristically crossed arms.

Jed frowned skeptically. “Come on. Let’s go.” He started in the direction the dog was last seen, but Kassie grabbed his arm to stop him. Annoyed, Jed turned to face his cousin. “What?”

“No, I’m being serious!” Kassie exclaimed, casting the sky another hopeful glance. “That thing was huge!”

“It doesn’t matter. We need to find Lexi before she gets lost,” Jed replied, pulling his hair from his ponytail and sliding his hair tie over his wrist.

Kassie nodded, lowering her eyes disappointedly from the sky. “Maybe she’ll find where it landed,” she suggested optimistically, turning to cast Jed a glance.

He rolled his eyes and drew his hair back again.


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Hey, readers! @MercedesBlue and I are writing this together, so the next chapter can be found in MercedesBlue's portfolio. But, here's the quick link for the next chapter. :) Magic: Chapter 2




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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Well this is quite the neat little start here. Loving the characters already here and I think you've also established a nice little mystery in the background without giving anything away which works really well in terms of a first chapter.

Anyway let's get right to it,

“Oh, come on! Not this song again!” Kassie exclaimed, reaching for the dial on the radio and snapping it off. Her annoyed brown eyes moved back to her phone. “At least we aren’t far from the cabin,” she mused, lifting her eyes and moving them toward her cousin.

Jed’s gaze moved momentarily from the road. A faint smile touched his lips as he halted the pickup at the end of the gravel lane they had been traveling on and flicked on the left blinker. “You’re so impatient,” he muttered, casting his cousin a teasing glance. “We’re literally like five minutes away…or less,” he added, turning the pickup onto another gravel road.


Well this is a nice little start here. Looks like we've got quite the little crew here and already we get the feeling they've known each other for quite a while and there's a rather nice sense of camaraderie about all of this. Loving the vibes so far. Let's see where this is going.

Kassie rolled her eyes and aimlessly traced a strand of her blond hair from the side of her cheek down to her waist as she glanced down at her phone. “Yeah,” she replied distantly.

Jed shot her a glance and slid a hand off the steering wheel, aimlessly pulling a strand of his hair that had come loose from his ponytail behind his ear.

An opening in the forest appeared ahead, and a gravel drive became visible. Jed slowed the speed of the pickup and made the turn into the driveway.


Oooh well that was an interesting little interaction, especially that last little note we got. There was definitely something to it there. Impatience seems like its going to pay a little bit more of a part here than just as a passing joke here.

Kassie’s eyes lifted from the blond ends of her hair she had been twisting. A faint smile touched her lips as she gazed in awe up at the two-story high cabin before her eyes. Letting her hair twirl out of the twist she had put it in, Kassie turned to face Jed. “I just can’t believe we get this whole place to ourselves until the family reunion. Dad’s crazy to have reserved it so early.”

Jed smiled faintly as he stopped the vehicle at the side of the cabin. “Yeah,” he replied shortly, pulling the keys out of the ignition. “But I don’t mind.” His eyes moved to the passenger seat, but Kassie had already slipped out of it and was pulling open the door to the backseat.

A golden retriever bounded out, dragging a leash behind it. It lunged toward Kassie and eagerly jumped on its hind legs to greet her.


Oooh this is some interesting information to work with. Looks like we're dealing with some kind of family reunion scenario. It doesn't appear like there's the usual family drama hanging around just yet but I'm sure there is going to be plenty of that as we go on.

“Hi, Lexi,” Kassie greeted as she bent down to scratch the dog behind her ears. Lexi dropped onto her front paws again as Kassie reached into the backseat and pulled out a bag of snacks she had just purchased.

Jed exited the vehicle and locked it behind himself. Lexi eagerly moved from Kassie toward Jed, dragging her leash dangerously behind her. Jed stepped back, lifting his eyes to Kassie.

She laughed, recognizing the disgust in her cousin’s hazel eyes. She called the dog to herself and started toward the porch. Jed followed behind her. Stepping to the side of the porch, he set the key he had been given to the lock and opened the door, allowing Kassie and her dog to enter first.


Oooh loving those tiny little details there on the dog there. Its hardly noticeable but I love it when we see these little things in a story. It just makes everything see so much more realistic and lived in and its great to see.

A refreshing coolness swept out into the summer heat as Jed pulled his keys from the door and entered the living room after Kassie.

His gaze moved to a comfortable sofa standing in front of a dark TV screen. The remote lay on a small wooden table beside the sofa. A coat hanger stood to the right of the door upon which Kassie had flopped Lexi’s leash.

The girl cast Jed a glance and started for the kitchen, humming a Christmas tune as enthusiastically as if snow were floating down from the summer sky. Her dog followed her. Jed exited the living room and started for the hall leading to the other rooms in the cabin. A thunderous bang suddenly exploded the silence. The windows rattled, followed by a chilling silence.


Well it looks like already this place has some pretty crazy things going on here. I'm sure a little bit of family drama really isn't too far around the corner at this rate. I'm looking forward to seeing what chaos we're going to have all of these people get up to.

“What was that?” Kassie shrieked as she ran into the hallway and grabbed Jed’s arm for protection as her nervous eyes moved about the cabin.

Jed shrugged in more of an attempt to relax his shoulders than to respond to Kassie. He stepped past his cousin to where Lexi stood, paws to the door, barking loudly. Casting Kassie a glance, Jed pulled open the door and stepped onto the porch, Lexi eagerly pressing past him to bark at the forest from where the sound appeared to have come from. Jed’s gaze moved to the edge of the forest, and he stared out at it in silent contemplation.

Kassie followed him outside, her worried eyes scanning the forest at the side of the cabin. “What was it?” Kassie whispered hoarsely, wrapping her pale fingers around Jed’s arm. “A bomb?” she asked, lifting her worried eyes to Jed’s face to search for comfort.


Okayy well that's an interesting reaction. We've got someone of them being a little concerned while some of them are only mildly concerned and seem to be trying to avoid it. Well I was expecting that to be some sort of typical family occurrence but it seems that just maybe we've got a little bit more on our hands here.

Jed shook his head distantly. “Maybe a hunter.” His eyes dropped to his cousin’s worried eyes gazing up at him. Gently, he laid a hand on her arm. “Nothing to worry about, okay?”

Lexi barked again and took a step closer to the grass separating her from the forest.

Kassie stepped forward and grabbed her dog’s collar to hold her back. Her worried eyes lifted to Jed’s face. “What would a hunter be doing down here?”

Jed shrugged. “Probably nothing to worry about.”


Well it looks like Jed is either that one person who can remain calm in absolutely every situation or there's something that Jed knows here that he doesn't want to reveal to anyone. Either way this little divide in reactions is making things very interesting here.

Lexi barked again and jolted forward.

“Whoa, girl,” Kassie shouted, trying to force the dog to take a step back. “Don’t go anywhere, Lexi. It’s probably not safe out there for a dog like you to be running around wild.”

Lexi’s barking grew more desperate. Kassie cast Jed a glance. The dog suddenly bolted forward, tearing itself free of Kassie’s restraining hold. “Lexi!” Kassie shrieked after her dog as the moving blur reached the edge of the woods.

Jed turned swiftly just as Kassie took off after her dog, screaming its name.

“Kassie!” Jed called after her, breaking into a run to catch up with his cousin. He reached the forest and plunged into it, following the row of bent grass blades in the direction he supposed Kassie had gone.


Well it looks like the dog definitely knows something is up from the looks of that. ALthough running immediately towards the danger is quite the move. Well at the very least it seems we're going to have these two investigate the situation after all while going after the dog.

Ahead, she came into view, running wildly toward the blurry image of her dog running crazily through the forest. Kassie slowed her footsteps and dropped to the ground, exhausted.

Jed stopped beside her, casting the vicinity a glance.

Kassie lifted her eyes to her cousin’s face. She frowned and quickly stood up, staring questioningly into the sky. “Jed…” she breathed, her lips parting in surprise.

“What?” Jed asked, continuing to glance around in search of the dog. “Where’d she go?”


Well that looks like its already been quite the tough chase if they seem ready to collapse. Hopefully poor Lexi is going to be alright and doesn't end up being caught in whatever craziness caused that massive explosion earlier that time. It definitely did not sound safe.

“What is…” Kassie’s voice trailed off as she stared up at the sky questioningly. She suddenly turned back to Jed. “Look! Look!” she exclaimed, pointing excitedly to the sky and eagerly grabbing Jed’s arm.

Jed frowned and glanced skeptically up at the sky from between the tree branches. “What?” he asked in an irritated tone. His eyes moved back to Kassie as he tried to pry her fingers from his arm. “We need to find your dog before she—"

“There it is again!” Kassie exclaimed, cutting off her cousin’s words and pointing wildly above her. Her excited brown eyes moved to Jed’s face as she tugged at his arm, still pointing to the sky. “I bet that’s what Lexi’s going crazy about.”


Oooh well Jed is absolutely certainly hiding something from the looks of that. Kassie is clearly seeing something odd there, the same thing that Lexi must have been after but Jed just can't be so blind and disinterested as to soundly ignore this so thoroughly unless there's some sort of reason behind it. Or you'd think so unless Jed is just that averse to doing things.

“Look, we don’t have time for this. We need to find your dog,” Jed ordered, tearing his arm free of Kassie’s fervent grasp.

Kassie frowned and lowered her arm, her big brown eyes slowly lowering from the sky. “Aw, man, it’s gone. I can’t see it anymore.”

She turned her eager eyes back to Jed and opened her arms in front of her. “It was the biggest bird I have ever seen,” she declared in perfect seriousness as her excited eyes traced her cousin’s disbelieving face and characteristically crossed arms.

Jed frowned skeptically. “Come on. Let’s go.” He started in the direction the dog was last seen, but Kassie grabbed his arm to stop him. Annoyed, Jed turned to face his cousin. “What?”


Okayyy well that was not quite what I was expecting and the expression that Jed managed there sounds genuine. That throws a few spanners into the there's something secret and nefarious theory but well let's see what happens by the time Lexi is actually found.

“No, I’m being serious!” Kassie exclaimed, casting the sky another hopeful glance. “That thing was huge!”

“It doesn’t matter. We need to find Lexi before she gets lost,” Jed replied, pulling his hair from his ponytail and sliding his hair tie over his wrist.

Kassie nodded, lowering her eyes disappointedly from the sky. “Maybe she’ll find where it landed,” she suggested optimistically, turning to cast Jed a glance.

He rolled his eyes and drew his hair back again.


Well that's definitely quite the note to end on there. Its not quite a cliffhanger but it certainly does more than enough to get us very intrigued about exactly what's just gone down there and I find myself very much wanting to read that second chapter.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall this is a wonderful first chapter that you've got going on here. I'm already loving the vibes of these characters especially Kassie and I'm looking forward to seeing more of them in the coming chapters. I definitely want to find out what's just happened here and what happens to poor Lexi.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Kate




Kaia says...


Hi, Kate!
Thanks so much for dropping by to leave a review. I keep forgetting to mention this to my other readers, but Chapter 2 is in MercedesBlue's portfolio under the same title: Magic. We are writing this together, so she starts where this chapter ends. So, after reading a chapter from me, you'll go to a chapter from her. Sorry for the confusion there. ;) Here's a link to chapter 2: Magic: Chapter 2

I really love your review style. It really helps me to know what impressions my words are making in the minds of the reader. Thanks so much for the review, and good luck in the tortoise race!!
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Very cool and interesting, it’s pretty fast paced and I like how we get to know the characters but you don’t drag the story or spend alot of time fully describing them. Overall very interesting and can’t wait to read more




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The book you are currently viewing has been written in part by KaiaJersaga and in part by MercedesBlue. The characters featured are a blend of KaiaJersaga's I Knew characters and MercedesBlue's Fire Keeper characters.

Dedicated to Mercedes' Hunter and Kaia's Zybryn

After all we put you guys through in the books you came from, we decided to show a little sympathy on you and preserve you from this one. We know you feel a little left out, but trust us, you won't miss the drama. ;)

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OEhhhh.......Looks like I've stumbled upon something very very vehhhreyyy interesting. A colaboration! Okay, okay...I see you. Imma trust you guys on this one alright. Let me see where this journey is going to take me. (*thinking in my head, I wonder) ;)

Hey there @KaiaJersaga & @MercedesBlue

Nice to see that you two are working together on this master piece.

First of all, you guys's title is amazing, it's the main reason I chose to review this piece. ;) I love your outlining and start of the story. I also like the cliffhanger at the end. (*mischievious grin, while thinking they are probably going to do something very evil later in the story, I wonder.)

Let's get this party started, shall we?

“Oh, come on! Not this song again!” Kassie exclaimed, reaching for the dial on the radio and snapping it off. Her annoyed brown eyes moved back to her phone. “At least we aren’t far from the cabin,” she mused, lifting her eyes and moving them toward her cousin.

Jed’s gaze moved momentarily from the road. A faint smile touched his lips as he halted the pickup at the end of the gravel lane they had been traveling on and flicked on the left blinker. “You’re so impatient,” he muttered, casting his cousin a teasing glance. “We’re literally like five minutes away…or less,” he added, turning the pickup onto another gravel road.

Kassie rolled her eyes and aimlessly traced a strand of her blond hair from the side of her cheek down to her waist as she glanced down at her phone. “Yeah,” she replied distantly.

Jed shot her a glance and slid a hand off the steering wheel, aimlessly pulling a strand of his hair that had come loose from his ponytail behind his ear.


Amazing start! A creepy ride in a car (I suppose a @MercedesBlue huh? ;) ) with two cousins, one very excited to get there and the other very patiently. If you know what I mean. First of all, I must say this. I really like the name of the girl, Kassie. It's very nice, reminds me of a story a friend of mine is writing, also very creepy and amazing. hahaha.

Okay, second thing. I like your descriptions, e.g. "Kassie rolled her eyes and aimlessly traced a strand of her blond hair from the side of her cheek down to her waist as she glanced down at her phone." I mean there is almost so much description (not in a bad way) that you can totally picture this happening in front of you. Like a very realistic vibe. I like it. You guys did a great job getting me hooked to the story immeaditly!

An opening in the forest appeared ahead, and a gravel drive became visible. Jed slowed the speed of the pickup and made the turn into the driveway.

Kassie’s eyes lifted from the blond ends of her hair she had been twisting. A faint smile touched her lips as she gazed in awe up at the two-story high cabin before her eyes. Letting her hair twirl out of the twist she had put it in, Kassie turned to face Jed. “I just can’t believe we get this whole place to ourselves until the family reunion. Dad’s crazy to have reserved it so early.”

Jed smiled faintly as he stopped the vehicle at the side of the cabin. “Yeah,” he replied shortly, pulling the keys out of the ignition. “But I don’t mind.” His eyes moved to the passenger seat, but Kassie had already slipped out of it and was pulling open the door to the backseat.

A golden retriever bounded out, dragging a leash behind it. It lunged toward Kassie and eagerly jumped on its hind legs to greet her.

“Hi, Lexi,” Kassie greeted as she bent down to scratch the dog behind her ears. Lexi dropped onto her front paws again as Kassie reached into the backseat and pulled out a bag of snacks she had just purchased.

Jed exited the vehicle and locked it behind himself. Lexi eagerly moved from Kassie toward Jed, dragging her leash dangerously behind her. Jed stepped back, lifting his eyes to Kassie.

She laughed, recognizing the disgust in her cousin’s hazel eyes. She called the dog to herself and started toward the porch. Jed followed behind her. Stepping to the side of the porch, he set the key he had been given to the lock and opened the door, allowing Kassie and her dog to enter first.

A refreshing coolness swept out into the summer heat as Jed pulled his keys from the door and entered the living room after Kassie.


Eeepppyy Creeppy over here.....

"An opening in the forest appeared ahead": Hold on a second!!! (*me stammering while saying) D...did...th..the..oppp...eee..nin....nggg. Jusss...ttt A...pppear???!!!

THat's totally not creepy at all right? >> (*that was me asking my spider under my bed in his cobweb, he blinked two times soo I suppose....nott..Cr...eeeppyyy at all? Haaahhhaa. Come here pillow, I really need you right now.

Lexi is an golden retriever? Welll, well, well. Some people got some nice dog taste. ;) Very nice.

Also here I like your descriptions very much lively and relatable.

His gaze moved to a comfortable sofa standing in front of a dark TV screen. The remote lay on a small wooden table beside the sofa. A coat hanger stood to the right of the door upon which Kassie had flopped Lexi’s leash.

The girl cast Jed a glance and started for the kitchen, humming a Christmas tune as enthusiastically as if snow were floating down from the summer sky. Her dog followed her. Jed exited the living room and started for the hall leading to the other rooms in the cabin. A thunderous bang suddenly exploded the silence. The windows rattled, followed by a chilling silence.

“What was that?” Kassie shrieked as she ran into the hallway and grabbed Jed’s arm for protection as her nervous eyes moved about the cabin.

Jed shrugged in more of an attempt to relax his shoulders than to respond to Kassie. He stepped past his cousin to where Lexi stood, paws to the door, barking loudly. Casting Kassie a glance, Jed pulled open the door and stepped onto the porch, Lexi eagerly pressing past him to bark at the forest from where the sound appeared to have come from. Jed’s gaze moved to the edge of the forest, and he stared out at it in silent contemplation.

Kassie followed him outside, her worried eyes scanning the forest at the side of the cabin. “What was it?” Kassie whispered hoarsely, wrapping her pale fingers around Jed’s arm. “A bomb?” she asked, lifting her worried eyes to Jed’s face to search for comfort.

Jed shook his head distantly. “Maybe a hunter.” His eyes dropped to his cousin’s worried eyes gazing up at him. Gently, he laid a hand on her arm. “Nothing to worry about, okay?”

Lexi barked again and took a step closer to the grass separating her from the forest.

Kassie stepped forward and grabbed her dog’s collar to hold her back. Her worried eyes lifted to Jed’s face. “What would a hunter be doing down here?”

Jed shrugged. “Probably nothing to worry about.”


Yeah Jed? What would a freakin' hunter be doin' here? How could I possibly not worry, huh?

Jed said: Maybe a HUNTER> Hunter????? I am as confused as Kassie now, but im sure everything gets explained along the way. TBH If Jed said "probably a bomb yeah", I might have just believed him, but a hunter. Come on dude, get your sleeves together. You're makin' people laugh here...

But on the other hand, the house seems cosy. I mean it has a tv and sofa, what could one want more, right? Cool!

Lexi barked again and jolted forward.

“Whoa, girl,” Kassie shouted, trying to force the dog to take a step back. “Don’t go anywhere, Lexi. It’s probably not safe out there for a dog like you to be running around wild.”

Lexi’s barking grew more desperate. Kassie cast Jed a glance. The dog suddenly bolted forward, tearing itself free of Kassie’s restraining hold. “Lexi!” Kassie shrieked after her dog as the moving blur reached the edge of the woods.

Jed turned swiftly just as Kassie took off after her dog, screaming its name.

“Kassie!” Jed called after her, breaking into a run to catch up with his cousin. He reached the forest and plunged into it, following the row of bent grass blades in the direction he supposed Kassie had gone.

Ahead, she came into view, running wildly toward the blurry image of her dog running crazily through the forest. Kassie slowed her footsteps and dropped to the ground, exhausted.

Jed stopped beside her, casting the vicinity a glance.

Kassie lifted her eyes to her cousin’s face. She frowned and quickly stood up, staring questioningly into the sky. “Jed…” she breathed, her lips parting in surprise.

“What?” Jed asked, continuing to glance around in search of the dog. “Where’d she go?”


Ooooohhhhhh ohhh Nohhh. Why?? Lexi! Poor girl... :(

And this is litterly movie like, right? The fact that Kassie ran after Lexi. Happens in every amazing movie, when you want to scream: "DON'T GO AFTER LEXI, SHE'S PROBABLY GONE ALREADY!!!" And the characters does just the opposite of what you just said.

OMGOsh, I really hope the hunter didn't take Lexi. Poor Lexi will be skinned alive, her nice golden fur used for a warm jacket against the rain and the cold and her meat being grilled, cooked or even bbq. I really pity her. :( Lexiiiiii Come back.

Kaia and Mercedes, please have mercy on poor Lexi, she cant die....

“What is…” Kassie’s voice trailed off as she stared up at the sky questioningly. She suddenly turned back to Jed. “Look! Look!” she exclaimed, pointing excitedly to the sky and eagerly grabbing Jed’s arm.

Jed frowned and glanced skeptically up at the sky from between the tree branches. “What?” he asked in an irritated tone. His eyes moved back to Kassie as he tried to pry her fingers from his arm. “We need to find your dog before she—"

“There it is again!” Kassie exclaimed, cutting off her cousin’s words and pointing wildly above her. Her excited brown eyes moved to Jed’s face as she tugged at his arm, still pointing to the sky. “I bet that’s what Lexi’s going crazy about.”

“Look, we don’t have time for this. We need to find your dog,” Jed ordered, tearing his arm free of Kassie’s fervent grasp.

Kassie frowned and lowered her arm, her big brown eyes slowly lowering from the sky. “Aw, man, it’s gone. I can’t see it anymore.”


Is this the magic part?
Well, things are getting excited now aren't, they Spidey, what do you think Piley? (FYI That's my name for my spider and my pillow)

Is Kassie a magical being?
Is Kassie even Jed's REAL cousin??
Or is one of Kassie's parents magic?
Or was Kassie born with it?

I have so many questions now......

She turned her eager eyes back to Jed and opened her arms in front of her. “It was the biggest bird I have ever seen,” she declared in perfect seriousness as her excited eyes traced her cousin’s disbelieving face and characteristically crossed arms.

Jed frowned skeptically. “Come on. Let’s go.” He started in the direction the dog was last seen, but Kassie grabbed his arm to stop him. Annoyed, Jed turned to face his cousin. “What?”

“No, I’m being serious!” Kassie exclaimed, casting the sky another hopeful glance. “That thing was huge!”

“It doesn’t matter. We need to find Lexi before she gets lost,” Jed replied, pulling his hair from his ponytail and sliding his hair tie over his wrist.

Kassie nodded, lowering her eyes disappointedly from the sky. “Maybe she’ll find where it landed,” she suggested optimistically, turning to cast Jed a glance.

He rolled his eyes and drew his hair back again.


Ohhhhhhh nohhhhhh, its the end already! Aww man. Very nicely written.

Overall, you guy's writing style is very nicely mixed together and it makes the story more awesome. I love the story itself too very much, the pacing is on point too. I could totally follow the story and it was very easy-readable and fun to read. Great start guys! Great start. I wonder where you are going to take things next, because I am really waiting for an explanation on the mysterious title.

Keep writing! Your guys are amazing! Have a nice day/night!

Amazingly yours,
Rinisha




Kaia says...


Hey, Rinisha!
Thanks so much for the review. So far what you have read is written by me. I wanted to go ahead and put @MercedesBlue here because she is writing the book with me. The next part that will be posted she wrote. But not to take all the credit on myself. MercedesBlue came up with all the good plot lines here. (I'm horrible at plotting myself. The plot for Rehenowa took my half a year to work out most of the problems with. Currently, I'm running into a few more troubles. Nothing too drastic, though)

And....YES it's another set of cousins. *slaps forehead* It didn't...quite...click until now that there's a set of cousins in this book and in Rehenowa. Hm. I guess I have a thing about cousins, lol.

And I'm pleased to see that Rinisha has an imagination that's flying above the very clouds overhead (if there are any. I haven't checked outside. ;) )

You've drawn quite a a few conclusions...and I see your hopes for this book are definitely quite shaded by the darkness of Rehenowa. We'll see how things turn out...*Evil grin*

Have a great evening, Rinisha!
-Kaia
P.S. I don't recommend keeping your spider with you as you read. This book might scare you a bit too much, and you might jump...and land...Well, you know that would be sad. So please keep poor little spider safe when you read. ;)




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