This poem is enjoyable. It's short, snappy. The rhymes, I noticed are excellent. They're masculine and just make sense. I like the first word of most lines are masculine rhymes. It's very good. I like the enjambment and the satirical hyperbole of being asleep. I also like that the title is very sarcastic. It's verbal irony, hence the quotation marks. It's very intense, which makes it funny.
In the end, keep writing. I look forward to more of your poems.
Shay
Points: 211
Reviews: 34
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