Young Writers Society

Hey there Kat here to review for you and Team WHY? on this epic review day

So this was a nice and short poem . I kind of wish that every single line ended in a question mark but that's okay because it didn't distract from your poem at all my favorite part had to be the first two lines because if made me think of the people dying and becoming one with the earth .

This poem does leave me wondering, what was IT ? The apocalypse ? That's what feels like . the last two lines in the middle stanza seem kind of forced . Instead of if you dare what about what you dare or or to speak up for what you believe in ? (okay what you dare was a really bad example sorry ).

Wrapping this review up, the last line was awesome ! It really tied in with the first stanza especially for me with the death thing and how tragic it all is. I would make it a little longer and explain more what is happening. Maybe use some literary devices and zesty adjectives . But the question thing really helped with your flow, nicely done.

~Kat

Honeybadger23, your poem is quite interesting. In the first two lines I got the sense that you were referencing death. Just as flowers shrivel and die so too do good people. That's how I took that first stanza. The second stanza corresponds well to the first, detailing the result of a lack of "good" people. I took it to signify a decrease in the quality of people with coming generations while the third stanza seems to illustrate a breakdown of human compassion for one another. Your poem is very powerful and sweet.


Sarah

Hey Honeybadger!

This is Eros here!

I am greatly moved by your poem.Its a realistic poem.Its basic theme is very beautiful.I loved that.It has a rhyming scheme too.Its very rare to see rhyming scheme these days.It is really very unique and a sweet little poem which hs won my heart.

You very your very own unique style of writting.You are a creative artist.

We all love your poems and we want you to write more sweet little poems like this one.

Hi Badger,
Very nice poem you have here!
I don't see any issues with grammar or spelling, so you're good there. I like the theme of wondering if there is still any good left in the world. (Loved the Sam quote, by the way!)
The only thing I think that could be improved a bit is rhythm. Just try to read it aloud a bit and see how you want things. Also, that last line was a bit bulky which is a bit unfortunate after the scene you set earlier. Can you perhaps shorten it or make it more dramatic or stick out? It's a good ending, but I think it could be a little more definitive.
Anyway, I think it was great, and hope to read more of yours!


-Falco