Young Writers Society

Hi Gravitem!

Your poem seems to come straight from the heart, and that is a very good thing. I think, as artists (in every sense of the word), that we should write things from the heart in hopes to create a community that can relate to each other through similar experiences.

It takes courage to write something deep like this, good job.

Your poem itself packs a punch, but the only thing i would suggest would be to fix a little punctuation, as in to add the commas after "I'm sorry" but that's it!

Keep writing!

<3

Hey there Gravy, it's Lee!
I haven't written a review in ages, so bear with me, haha.

To begin with, this is, as Inconspicuous already mentioned, very clearly from the heart. It was smooth and generally well-written, but I'd like to suggest some improvements. Feel free to take whatever advice you find useful.

I'm sorry mother

But just this once, let me fail you again.

Hello, Myth! (do you still go by that name?)

This poem was powerful, straightforward, and clearly came from the heart. I don't have many things to say about it that aren't positive, really. I will say that it was almost a little too straightforward, as poetry is typically an alternate form expressing something, rather than just saying it outright. However, that's really just a personal opinion, and I'm not here to dictate your art. All in all, wonderful poem, with a beautiful and bittersweet subject.

P.S. This is almost entirely off-topic, but I can't help but read every 'I'm sorry mother' to the tune of Imagine Dragon's 'Amsterdam', but hey, maybe that's just me.

Hey Gravitem!

This poem is very convincing of what you are trying to say. It is a simple one but it is beautiful and really relevant. It is a really good poem and the last stanza is my favourite. I hope you post more such poems. Also, I read your other poems and they are really amazing.