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She was the Sun, He was the Moon

by GengarIsBestBoy

She was the sun.

He was the moon.

She was a flaming ball of bitterness and spite,

Like an ancient god angered by a foolish mortal.

She blinded all in her path, with no care for the burns she left.

She was devastating.

He was silent and intuitive,

Like an Ivy-League scholar studying away in the night.

He was a glowing orb of hope in the darkness.

He was optimistic.

She was lonely…

…until the moon entered her orbit.

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Stickied -- Fri May 19, 2023 2:44 pm
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GengarIsBestBoy says...

Uhhh… i dont really know what to say about this. It was just a random idea I had, lol.
Also, although I labeled it as romantic, I think it could work platonically too

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Tue May 23, 2023 12:24 pm
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loveissourgrapes wrote a review...

Helloooo! This is Ina a.k.a loveissourgrapes, and I am here to review your poem. I was supposed to review this when I saw it, but I was busy that time, so here I am now, hihi. Anyways, let's gooo!

First impressions, I thought it was something related to Greek mythology or something but it reminds me of a couple who have complete opposite personalities. Like the girl has a sweet and sunshine-y personality and the guy was as cold as the moon. The girl was lonely 'til she meet this boy. Not going to lie, that's pretty sweet too. I love how the way each stanza and line are written from the opposite direction.

Pretty good through for a romantic poem. I wished to write like something like this some day. It is good, keep up writing! Have a good day/night everyone!

GengarIsBestBoy says...

Thanks 4 the review!

loveissourgrapes says...

you're welcome!

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Sat May 20, 2023 9:00 pm
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Kelisot says...


The only interesting part is how the Sun, which represents optimism (or sometimes being overly optimistic, if reversed iirc) is the Moon, while the Sun represents blindness and illusion, which is the Moon (and sometimes unsatisfaction if reversed IIRC). I like the irony added in this as someone who has some knowledge of tarot! I found this interesting :D

~ Kelisot

GengarIsBestBoy says...

Hey! Thanks 4 the review! I actually wrote the poem before I had the idea to make the cover from tarot cards, but I'm pleasantly surprised that I made the connection by accident! I'm actually fairy new to tarot, lol

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Fri May 19, 2023 3:08 pm
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StellaAdaire wrote a review...

Oh my goodness, I absolutely love this! The imagery you used was captivating, and I loved the way that you formatted the poem so that has the feel of a back and forth, a conversation. "Like an Ivy-League scholar studying away in the night" may have been my favorite line, I really enjoyed the way that it captures the gentle feeling of the moon, along with the vague sense of loneliness and eternal striving which the moon can hold. I also love the way that the similes you used for the sun and the moon tie each to such a different point in time and history, with an ancient god set beside such a scholar. Beautiful use of imagery and emotion throughout!

GengarIsBestBoy says...

Thanks for the review!

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