So, I guess the world has been dethroned,
Underneath the layers of unknown,
Layers of friends to be found.
Light, Dark, Health.
You three are the brightness in this world, while I feel like the hoarded wealth.
Hi Izzy here for a second review cause the other one accidently got deleted (oops)
I think this is awesome what you are doing with your characters and how you are making them more...human.
This is a good poem about Sully and who he is and how he needs his friends...
Yes? No? Maybe?
I haven't even got to chapter three yet in SMSU
Don't kill me.
Okay I have to go take another test on EAP now!
Izzy
Hello Flumadiddle! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul.
With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overallStrikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.
Keep up the great work!
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