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Humans and Moths

by Flumadiddle



Moths.
Annoying,
Ugly,
Scary Moths.
---

Humans.
Pretty,
Calm,
Smart Humans.
---
Moths.
Fuzzy,
Adorable,
Dog-like Moths.
---
Humans.
Monstrous,
Terrifying,
Anger-ridden Humans.
---
This world is different,
From every page you enter.
Be it of the little guys,
Or the ones on top.


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Fri Dec 08, 2017 12:46 pm
woahhitherepal says...



AHHHHH YOU POSTED IT YAY
I LOVE THIS POEM A LOT PAL




Flumadiddle says...


THANKS YOU



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Fri Dec 08, 2017 3:08 am
LittleLee says...



This is adorable! <3




Flumadiddle says...


Thanks!



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Thu Dec 07, 2017 10:27 pm
shusher wrote a review...



It's Joel, comming at cha with a review. Also... hi.

I like the flipped perspectives. Why is there no bolded phrase in the first stanza. Why is the last adjective and not the second adjective the bolded line in the 4th stanza? Why'd you use page instead as the chosen symbol in the last stanza when the last 2 lines haven't much to do with pages, unless it's a reference to the poem? Also, what do you think of a review in the forms of questions?




Flumadiddle says...


I like the review in forms of questions. Its new.


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shusher says...


woot. Hooray for original content! lol



Flumadiddle says...


For sure



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Thu Dec 07, 2017 9:27 pm
izanami wrote a review...



Hello Flumadiddle! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!

Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overall
Strikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.

Spoiler! :
Moths.
Annoying,
{u}gly,
{s}cary {m}oths.
---
{remove this "enter"}
Humans.
Pretty, {**COUGH I'M NOT PRETTY COUGH OH WAIT COUGH I'M NOT HUMAN COUGH}
{c}alm,
{s}mart {h}umans.
---
Moths.
Fuzzy,
{a}dorable,
{d}og-like {m}oths. {Usually, "dog-like" is a bad thing"}
---
Humans.
Monstrous,
{t}errifying,
{a}nger-ridden {h}umans.
---
This world is different,
{with} every page you enter.
{b}e it of the little guys,
{o}r the ones on top.


My interpretation:



This is about the comparison between moths and humans.

Overall:



Overall, I liked. It produces the correct imagery for the interpretation that I had created. However, I want to teach you that you don't have to capitalize every single line in the poem. Honestly, it's actually more grammatically correct that way, and I know how you are :wink:

Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --

Kara

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Flumadiddle says...


Yeah, I like correct grammar. :3 And thanks!



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I JUST POSTED THIS WHO LIKED IT WHO SHOW YOUR FACE




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HI I LIKED IT.



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**doesn't show face**



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